Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jeff,

I am writing this letter to request you for minimising my working hours. I am currently working as customer service representative for 40 hours per week which requires five days of a week.

Elucidating the details why I need to reduce my working hours. To be honest, i am thinking to persue my further study to enhance my broden of horizen in my field. As you know that i am graduated in Human Resource Management. Since i egar to acquire post graduate diploma in similar field, it requires to enroll in part time study. Therefore i want to work 20 hours instead of full time.

Well, i would like to work at weekend from friday to Sunday. My college probably open for first 4 days of week . So, it would so perfect to access my schooling during weekdays regardless effective my working hours.

This study would certainly beneficial for my career opportunities especially in your company. Firstly, it will boost my confidence and skill in recruiting procedure with the help of valuable training during course. Further, this course allows me to engage in internership where i can learn soft skills such as communication, screening of new employees, recruitment and selection process, ultimately assit me to proliferate my productivity at workplace.

I hope you will consider my request in positive way and bestow me with this opportunity.

Hope for your prompt and positive response.

Yours Sincerely,

Mrs. Khosa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points and maintains a clear, polite request. You explain that you want to pursue a postgraduate diploma in Human Resource Management, specify that you would prefer to work from Friday to Sunday, and describe benefits to the company, including stronger recruitment skills and improved productivity. These details make the purpose clear and support your request. The employer-benefit section is particularly relevant, although the link between the course and practical gains for the company could be explained more precisely—for example, how the training would improve your current customer-service work or support recruitment needs. Overall, the response develops the task well; a more specific explanation of the employer’s direct benefit would make the case even more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall progression: it introduces the request, explains the reason, proposes a schedule, and then outlines benefits before closing politely. Paragraphing helps the reader distinguish these stages, and connectors such as “Therefore,” “Firstly,” and “Further” make relationships between ideas visible. This is a coherent arrangement, with some flexibility in linking ideas. However, a few transitions feel mechanical or interrupt the flow, particularly “Elucidating the details why…” and “Well,”. The schedule paragraph also moves quickly from the college timetable to the proposed workdays, so the connection could be stated more directly. Use natural transitions and make each paragraph’s opening sentence clearly introduce its main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary relevant to study and employment, including “post graduate diploma,” “recruitment and selection process,” and “productivity.” These choices help communicate the professional context. However, several inaccurate or unnatural expressions make the wording less clear and controlled, such as “request you for minimising,” “broden of horizen,” “bestow me with this opportunity,” and “proliferate my productivity.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “persue,” “egar,” and “internership,” are also noticeable. Some ambitious vocabulary is used where a simpler, more natural phrase would be more effective. Focus on accurate collocations and spelling, and choose professional but familiar wording rather than formal expressions that do not fit the context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple statements and attempts at longer, complex sentences, for example the sentence beginning “Since i egar to acquire…” and the explanation of how the course could support workplace performance. This shows an effort to vary sentence structure. However, many sentences contain errors in clause construction, verb forms, articles, or agreement, which sometimes make the reader pause. For instance, “I am writing this letter to request you for…” has an incorrect grammatical pattern, while “Since i egar to acquire…” is not a complete clause as written. There are also errors in “i am graduated” and “this study would certainly beneficial.” Practise building complete clauses and checking verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries; this will make your ideas easier to follow.

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