Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, travelling industry is booming, as with the advancement of technology the internet make an easy way for all tourist spots accesible to all, irrespective of geographical barriers. Visitors visit new place where they emphasie on taking photos, rather than exploring the place. Although this happens because they want to show-off and influence others by posting their images on the social media platforms, I believe this promotes superficial lifestyle among people which is an unfavourable development.

On the the one hand, this is because of the dawn of social media, where everyone flaunt-off their lifestyle and updates where theyy are. Mainly people travel new place to fill their feed with the images not for knowing the specification and significane of that place. For an instance, couple travel hill stations or historical buildings to spend some quality time and click photos to update thier status, they do not intrigue in the significance of the buildings or the spots.

Therefore, I believe this distort the view hold by the society that exploring new places is a great source of information, which gives a sense of connectivity to the travellers and they can witness, how beautiful the nature is. In contrast, nowadays, people are more in showing off, by clicking photos and uploading them, which influence others to do the same, whether they have money or not. This put strain on their pockets and at the same time people are lacking in broaden their knowledge, as not observing the place and expanding horizons. They see the place with their cameras, instead of having eyes and feeling the vibes of that place.

In conclusion, for making more flowers and gaining popularity in the social apps people pay a visit to unfamiliar location, while I belive this trend align our society towards superficial lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both questions: social media is presented as a reason people take photographs, and you clearly judge the trend negatively because it encourages superficiality, financial pressure, and less learning about places. The examples of visitors photographing hill stations and historical buildings are relevant. This meets the task well, and the position is clear from the introduction through to the conclusion. To make the response more fully developed, explain the causes and consequences more precisely—for example, why online approval motivates visitors, or how photographing a site prevents them from engaging with its history. Some claims, such as people travelling “whether they have money or not,” are asserted rather than supported, so a specific example or qualification would strengthen them.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The main line of argument is generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “On the one hand,” “Therefore,” and “In conclusion” signal relationships between ideas. However, the first body paragraph begins with “On the one hand” without a corresponding “on the other hand,” which makes the organisation feel mechanical. Some links between sentences are also unclear: “Therefore” introduces a further consequence, but the connection to the preceding example could be made more explicit. The conclusion repeats the central view but adds little synthesis. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “superficial lifestyle,” “significance,” “connectivity,” and “expanding horizons.” These choices help communicate your concerns about social media and tourism. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less natural: “flaunt-off,” “fill their feed,” “make more flowers,” and “specification” do not express the intended ideas clearly. There are also spelling errors such as “accesible,” “significane,” and “thier.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than forcing less familiar expressions. For example, use “gain followers” instead of “make more flowers,” and “historical importance” instead of “specification” when discussing a site.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a concession in “Although this happens because…” and longer cause-and-effect structures. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms occur often enough to make some sentences difficult to read. Examples include “the internet make,” “this distort the view,” and “people are lacking in broaden their knowledge.” The opening sentence also combines several ideas in a way that obscures the grammatical relationships. Practise checking subject–verb agreement and use a clear verb pattern after each subject: for instance, “This distorts society’s view” and “people lack opportunities to broaden their knowledge.” Shorter, accurately controlled sentences would improve clarity while you continue developing complex structures.

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