Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many people now want to explore defferent places to relieved thier stress to make happy life.

Majority of the people want to travel or visit to a famous place to collect memories together with friends and family's.This kind of activity can give peace of mind to every person who are in the sad situation .Because of the beautiful views and delicious food of the place to visit it can relieved from stress or in a sad situation and it can give smile to their face and to start a beautiful days with a smile. As a human being i believed that this activity is important to us specially to all people who have a lot of work reason to have a depression in life because life is once only so you need to take care of it. So for me it is a positive trend. I want to share my experience of it as i remember on last November 2025 . I was in the difficult situation i am depresed because of my workmate behavior so i went a tour in japan together with my friends and when i arrived in japan i feel happy because i saw people around me keeps smiling on me so i smile too , and i went to the beautiful places there that I been never seen before i was amazed on that place . when im comeback on my on country and go for my work i feel happy and keep smile to my workmate .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear opinion that the trend is positive and support it with a personal account of visiting Japan. However, the response only minimally addresses the actual topic: the question is about people taking photographs of themselves at famous places without looking at those places, but your discussion focuses mainly on travel as a way to relieve stress. You do not explain why people take these photographs or consider the specific behaviour of prioritising a selfie over the destination. The Japan example describes seeing places and feeling happier, but does not connect this experience to taking photographs. To develop the response, explain possible motives such as sharing experiences online or seeking approval, then assess whether this distracts people from appreciating the location.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence from a general statement, to reasons for travel, to your opinion and personal example. The experience in Japan gives the response a recognisable focus, and phrases such as “Because of” and “So for me” signal relationships between ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so its stages are difficult to distinguish. Several ideas are joined in lengthy sentences, and links such as “Because” do not always make the relationship clear. The opening also introduces stress relief without establishing how it relates to the photograph-taking in the prompt. Use separate paragraphs for the explanation, your evaluation and example, and make each transition connect directly to the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for travel and feelings, including “beautiful views,” “peace of mind,” “difficult situation” and “depressed.” These expressions help communicate your personal experience, and the meaning is generally recoverable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, particularly repeated references to being happy, smiling and visiting beautiful places. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “defferent,” “thier” and “depresed,” which reduce accuracy. Some combinations sound unnatural, for example “to relieved thier stress” and “start a beautiful days.” Build a wider set of topic-specific expressions about photographs, social media and appreciating attractions, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons and examples, such as the sentence beginning “Because of the beautiful views.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the range remains limited and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur in “to relieved,” “it can relieved,” and “every person who are”; tense control is also inconsistent in the Japan account, moving between “I was,” “I feel” and “when im comeback.” Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries need attention as well, as in “a beautiful days” and the long run-on account of the trip. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea and a clearly controlled subordinate clause, then check tense consistency and punctuation.

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