Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Introduction:

Most of the individuals visit popular places to take pictures of themselves instead of seeing the site.In my opinion this is a negitive trend and in following paragraph i will discss why this is occuring.

This is happening beacuse most the individuals are not interested to visit the place, they come to place just to take pictures to post them on social media like facebook, instagram to obtain some views likes and comments.For instance if someone see a random guy picture on social media on the London bridge, he craves to visit the place witout knowing thier history or other aspect they just want to go there and take the pictures. This is like a competition that has to be stoped as it creates bad impact on mental health.

Furthermore, before this potograph trends individuals are more intellegent and well informed beacuse they read alot and vist the well known places to gain knowledge from it like some piece of information, art work and many more things . This is now declining, the main reason of this lack of interest of the youth due to this the upcoming generations have less intelactual skills, they will contribute nothing for their upcoming generation. This is happening beacuse of the fast lifestyle of the people they spend most of thier time with non living things mobiles and other electric devices and thier minds are possessed with it, they even not realised there is life outside the divices

In conclusion, taking pictures of themself are not a bad thing but if we do it in a large amount it would not be healthy for our mind and has many negitive impact on our lives, hence we should visit the places to take some rest and relaxation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that this is a negative trend, and you identify social media attention as a reason people take these photographs. The example of visiting London Bridge to post a picture helps illustrate that motivation. However, the response only partly develops the task: the discussion of declining intelligence and future generations is asserted rather than explained, and it is not clearly linked to taking photos instead of appreciating a place. The question asks why this behaviour is increasing and whether it is positive or negative; your conclusion briefly acknowledges that taking photos is not inherently bad, but the negative judgement could be stated and supported more consistently. Develop one or two relevant reasons with clearer explanation and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise its basic organisation. The first body paragraph focuses on social media, while the next shifts to reduced learning and device use. However, progression between these ideas is not always clear, and the second paragraph combines several claims without showing how they connect. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help signal stages, but some connections are mechanical or unclear; for example, “This is happening” does not clearly identify which idea it refers to. Improve cohesion by giving each paragraph one central point, using precise references, and explaining the link between causes and consequences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “social media,” “mental health,” “gain knowledge,” and “fast lifestyle.” These choices make your main ideas understandable. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, such as “negitive,” “beacuse,” “intellegent,” and “potograph.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “obtain some views likes and comments” and “their minds are possessed with it.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Build accuracy by checking spelling carefully and learning natural collocations for online attention, tourism and cultural learning; choose precise expressions rather than relying on broad phrases such as “bad impact.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a conditional structure in “if someone see a random guy picture … he craves to visit the place.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries can make the message difficult to follow. For example, “most the individuals are not interested to visit” lacks a necessary article and uses an awkward grammatical pattern, while “they even not realised” has an incorrect verb construction. Punctuation and spacing also need attention, as in “site.In my opinion.” Practise building accurate sentences first, then combine them using conjunctions; check subject–verb agreement and verb forms during revision.

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