Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In my opinion,people visit the place because they saw it on the internet especially the famous place but they didnt looking in the place.They are focusing on the selfie pictures only if they good or not.They are taking an attention only and upload it on social media.

I thinks its a negative trend because they are not checking the place if this location is dangered or not.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You give a clear opinion that this is a negative trend, and you offer a relevant reason: people focus on taking selfies rather than paying attention to the place, including whether it is dangerous. However, the response addresses the task only minimally. The explanation for why people behave this way is brief, and the negative effects are not developed with an example or further reasoning. The response also falls substantially short of the required 250 words, leaving both parts of the question largely unsupported. To improve, explain possible motivations such as wanting social-media attention, then develop your view with a specific example of what visitors may miss or risk by concentrating on photographs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it first gives a possible reason for the behaviour and then states that you consider it negative. This makes your main position identifiable. However, the ideas are presented in only two short paragraphs, with little progression or explanation connecting them. The repeated use of “they” also leaves some references vague, and the relationship between seeking attention and failing to check whether a location is dangerous could be made clearer. Use a fuller paragraph structure, with one paragraph explaining the causes and another developing your opinion. Linking phrases such as “As a result” or “For example” can help show how each supporting point relates to your main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “internet,” “selfie pictures,” “social media,” and “dangered,” so the general topic is understandable. However, the vocabulary is limited and some choices or combinations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the message awkward. For instance, “taking an attention” does not express the intended idea naturally, and “dangered” is not the appropriate form for describing a location that may be unsafe. Build a wider range of topic vocabulary and learn common collocations, such as “attract attention,” “post photos online,” and “pay attention to the surroundings.” More precise wording would help you explain both the motivation and the consequences clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate your basic ideas using simple sentences, and the reader can identify your opinion. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and the response relies almost entirely on short, simple structures. Examples include “I thinks,” where the verb does not agree with the subject, and “they didnt looking,” which has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “because they saw it on the internet” also needs clearer construction to show who saw what. Practise accurate present-simple forms and verb patterns, then combine related ideas using clauses such as “because” and “although.” Check subject–verb agreement, auxiliary verbs, and punctuation when revising.

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