Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
There are number of places which are popular for their beauty or history. These days tourists are more and more engaged in taking pictures of themselves rather than knowing about that place. This essay will elaborate the reasons behind it and shows about its negative impact.
The social media like TikTok, Instagram, Facebook are the main driver of this trend. Here people posts their pictures with perfect angle of the location that fascinates other folks to visit that particular place. People spends a lot of time for capturing perfect photo rather than knowing the historical values. This makes the place unnecessarily crowded. Moreover, for some people this is their Wishlist to visit places which on trend on social media. However, social media platforms working as delivering knowledge as well as information of the hidden places which are not even discovered yet. Travelers explore a lot of untouched places and post it on their pages and that attracts others to come and visit. This has become fantasy to be on those places. Although people who comes to visit place to know their history, do not get enough time and space.
Furthermore, This trend deteriorates the quality and beauty of those places. For instance, Taj Mahal such a popular place for their love story. Youngsters visit this place and take pictures over there. Despite of knowing history of taj Mahal, they spends time only to fill their social media pages with this popular places they visit. Also, Machu Pichu is a popular place too. The increasing number of tourists has made negative effect on land which makes more soil erosion.
In conclusion, There are positive and negative effects of this trend. And this essay clearly mentions about more negative impact. Although, this trend helps to explore more about places but people are getting more engaged in taking pictures rather than knowing history which is definite a negative development for gener
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and the evaluation of whether it is positive or negative. The position is clear throughout, and the ideas are relevant. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention social media as a driver, the explanation of why people prioritize photos over history could be more deeply explored. The conclusion is slightly abrupt and contains an incomplete sentence, which affects the overall impact of the argument. To improve, ensure that each paragraph fully develops the 'why' and 'how' behind your claims with more detailed reasoning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences is slightly disjointed. For example, the transition between the positive aspects of social media and the negative impact on historical sites in the second paragraph is a bit abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would help elevate your score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'deteriorates', 'historical values', and 'untouched places'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and minor errors, such as 'This has become fantasy to be on those places' and 'gener' (incomplete word). Some collocations are also slightly unnatural, such as 'people who comes to visit place'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise vocabulary and ensuring that your word choices are contextually appropriate and grammatically accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('people who comes', 'people spends') and article usage ('the Taj Mahal', 'a popular place'). There are also punctuation issues, such as the unnecessary capitalization of 'This' in the middle of a sentence. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article consistency will help improve your accuracy.
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