Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this day and age, people are becoming more self centered and self obsessed. Individuals nowadays get influenced easily from social media and try to follow the trends. visiting specific in trend place is one of the most common trends on internet right now. Although such kind of travelling have some benefits, drawback of this can not be unseen as well.

To embark with, youngsters are under the influence of social media. New generation spend most of their time on phones, resulting in loss of interest in outside world. Consequently, people use good places just to use them as a good background for their photos. Furthermore, this face paced lifestyle not only brings physical fatigue, but also torture people mentally. A significant percentage of people just want to run away from their daily routine, regardless of the place they visit.

When people visit places it does brings a lot of benefits. Firstly, visitors contribute to the economy of the area they are visiting. Apart from this, it generate a lot of options for natives to generate some income trough relevent businesses. However, being so self obsessed is not a good thing. If people are just visiting places to take selfies and to admire themselves rather than the place they are visiting, it is extremely disappointing.

In the end, every coin has two sides. While this trend serve some benefits to the local communities, such behavior of young generation is unacceptable. visiting places should matter more than just taking selfies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the trend and whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention social media influence and economic benefits, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. The essay is also slightly under the minimum word count (249 words), which necessitates a penalty in Task Achievement as the response is not fully developed. To improve, ensure you expand on your points with more detailed explanations or concrete examples to meet the length requirement and provide a more thorough exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'To embark with', 'Furthermore', and 'Consequently'. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'To embark with', which is not standard English. Referencing is generally clear, but the progression of ideas could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the overall flow is occasionally interrupted by simplistic sentence structures. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the relationship between sentences is more fluid.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You use some relevant terms like 'self-centered', 'self-obsessed', and 'fast-paced', but there are also instances of awkward phrasing and minor errors, such as 'in trend place' instead of 'trending locations' and 'trough relevent businesses' (spelling error). The repetition of words like 'generate' and 'visit' limits your score. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms and collocations, and ensure you proofread for spelling errors that can distract the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the accuracy of the writing. Examples include 'such kind of travelling have' (subject-verb agreement), 'drawback of this can not be unseen' (awkward phrasing), and 'it does brings' (incorrect verb form). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct verb tense usage, and refining your control over complex sentence structures to ensure they are error-free.

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