Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this modern era, numbers of individuals are exploring famous places for taking picture themselves without get any information about that place. I believe that can happen bad for someone and i will discus in forth coming paragraphs with example.

To commence with, there are numbers of reasons why this trend has negative points .First and foremost is abedon places . To clarify it, many people visit abedon places to take asthetic images to upload on internet for getting reach on it. but that can dangerous for them because there can some homeless commoners who can harm them to protect themselves As, they do not have good mentality. As well as , most of people are go to rain forest for lookin that views, yet visitors can get injury from animals . Hence, individuals put themselves to the risk for just few photographs.

Further more, nowadays new young generation getting interest to climb the mountain for make some memory there, which would be not safe for them . For example, in 2022, i and some mates went to climb the mounteverest in India . we had all the safety accessories for climbing . while clicking a picture my friend slipped from snow then fallen in the ground level and he died in few minutes.

Conclusion, although visit the well-known places and taking pictures is the part of memory yet i believe it is negative trend As, without any information to visit the places is very dangerous for individuals

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the trend and expressing a negative opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and often lacks clarity. The word count is 248, which is slightly under the 250-word minimum, resulting in a penalty. The arguments, such as the dangers of visiting 'abedon' (abandoned) places or climbing mountains, are presented but lack depth and logical flow. The personal example provided is somewhat extreme and not fully integrated into a coherent argument about the broader social trend of photography-focused tourism. To improve, you should expand your points with more detailed explanations and ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and grammatical errors. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'To commence with', 'Further more', 'In conclusion'), they are often used mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks the necessary cohesion to support a clear, flowing argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which occasionally impedes communication. There are several spelling errors, such as 'abedon' for abandoned, 'asthetic' for aesthetic, and 'mounteverest' for Mount Everest. The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is a reliance on repetitive structures. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary and improve your accuracy in word choice and spelling. Focus on learning collocations and using more precise terminology to describe the phenomena you are discussing, rather than relying on simple, often misused, descriptive words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the message. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'most of people are go'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'without get any information'). Complex sentence structures are attempted but are often faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misplaced commas and spaces. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of articles and prepositions. Reducing the frequency of these errors is essential for achieving a higher band score.

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