Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Increasing technology is the most concerning issue all over the world. Most of the majority of individuals these days visits most famous places to have pictures of own, without taking pictures of visited place. Looking this statement this negative trend and will be discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin this, most of the individuals think that the advancement of technology makes their mind washed by the influencers posting pictures of their own on the social media and getting attracted by everyone. they does not giving any positive message and knowledge about the historical places. They simply looking towards likes, comments and shares where they find benefit to earn capital and all their viewers are doing same and being uneducated. Moreover, they think that we can get information from the internet also so we did not need to struggle their in lines to have information and seeing some important architectures.
Furthermore, it can also disturb the other visitors by taking their own photos, others also can not get information and view what they want and this whole impact is on the visitors and the money which can for the maintaining cost of the monument. By this trend the majority of visitors are not visiting the places where they feel unsafe.
In conclusion, by taking photographs on the famous places is only by the social media and covering their memories. But this is a negative trend because it can prevent most of visitors from visiting places and have the less capital to maintaining it, that why they are not reconstructing.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: why this is happening and whether it is a positive or negative trend. However, the development of ideas is limited. The explanation for why this is happening focuses heavily on social media influencers, but the argument lacks depth and specific examples. The discussion on the negative impact is somewhat repetitive and vague, particularly the point about 'money for maintaining cost,' which is not clearly linked to the act of taking photos. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments are underdeveloped and lack logical extension, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin this,' 'Moreover,' and 'Furthermore,' they are sometimes used incorrectly or mechanically. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'they does not giving any positive message,' where the pronoun 'they' lacks a clear antecedent. The logical flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors, making the overall structure feel somewhat disjointed and difficult to follow in places.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. The student relies on basic phrasing, such as 'most of the individuals' and 'famous places.' There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'makes their mind washed' instead of 'brainwashed,' and 'earn capital' instead of 'generate income' or 'monetise.' Some phrases are also unidiomatic, such as 'covering their memories.' While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the reliance on simple, repetitive vocabulary restrict the score in this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede the reader's understanding. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'they does not giving'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'Looking this statement this negative trend'). The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors, such as 'that why they are not reconstructing.' Punctuation is also inconsistent. These frequent errors, particularly in basic grammar, indicate a lack of control over sentence construction.
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