Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Most of individuals are prefer to do digital shopping rather than visit to in-person stores. Although shopping from websites offers flexibility, accessibility and cost-effective, it has some drawbacks such as online scams and quality of products.
One of the major disadvantage of online shopping is digital frauds. In other words, when consumers purchase any item from online platforms, they have to fill out their personal information such as credit/debit card details, by which sometimes their personal identity miss used and fraud happened by using their card details and they left nothing. Additionally, some applications like Temu spend unusual products which hardly match with their picture and material, which depicts on their website. Therefore, these demerits are primary considerable while doing digital purchase.
Despite these challenges, the merits of e-shopping are far more substantial. To begin with, such way of shopping is remarkably convenient because customers can search and compare any product online at their convenience, by which they can read essential information about product and feedbacks before buying them. Furthermore, internet based shopping is extensively beneficial, especially for those who are living in remote areas and limited with transportation. For example, Amazon is a hug of online products and people can have profound information before ordering. Consequently, these benefits of digital purchase cannot be overlooked under their issues.
In conclusion, even though online shopping has some problems related to e-scams and untrusted material, the advantages are overlap in teams of getting products anywhere without visiting independent stores and go through intensive details and reviews.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 1.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks about people visiting well-known places to take photographs without looking at the location, whereas the essay discusses the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping. Because the response fails to address the specific task question entirely, it cannot be awarded a score higher than a 1.0 for Task Achievement. While the essay is structured as an argument, it does not engage with the prompt's subject matter, rendering the content irrelevant to the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
Despite the off-topic content, the essay demonstrates a logical structure. It uses paragraphing effectively to separate the disadvantages and advantages of the topic discussed. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion' are used to link ideas, although some transitions are slightly mechanical. The progression of ideas is clear within the context of the essay's own internal logic, even though that logic does not pertain to the actual exam prompt.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary range is adequate for the task. The student uses some topic-specific terminology related to e-commerce, such as 'digital frauds', 'personal identity', and 'remote areas'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'miss used' (misused), 'spend unusual products' (send/sell), and 'hug of online products' (hub). While these errors are noticeable, they do not generally impede the reader's understanding of the student's intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Most of individuals are prefer') and incorrect preposition usage ('visit to in-person stores'). Punctuation and sentence construction are often faulty, such as in the phrase 'by which sometimes their personal identity miss used'. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of errors is high, which limits the score to the 5.0-5.5 range.
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