Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

nowadays people are visiting many places in different time and they are capture the photoes for remember the moment.however, they could not focus for actual place secenario.i agree with this statement. i can explain both positive and negative trend in following paragraphs with relevant examples.

first and foremost, why i am agree with this statement because of today is young generation and they have aim to show to other friend how am i rich? and we are traveling to new places every vacation time . i can not say that we should not to visit new places. but we should focus the actual on place not only for photoes.for instance, i have visited one place which are ajanta elora claves, they made by stone and have different god . if we focus only capture photos us, we can not understand the art of sculptor.

secondly, this trends have two opinion like positive and negative. i agree with that we shold capture the moment because it will not come again in our life. we get one chance in once in year .however, we should be focus on actual place for the know about the history , for example, my village name is jornang which located in mahesana district in gujarat india. it has one temple name is kapileshvar mahadev which are big and beautiful . while i asked to old parents for history abot the temple, i knew it was pandavas time period temple. in additional, it made by kunti so name was kuntishwar mahadev.

In conclusion, both are important in our life so we should be focus not only photoes but also actual place.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the trend and discussing whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is limited. The explanation for why people take photos is somewhat superficial, focusing on social status ('how am i rich?'). The discussion on whether the trend is positive or negative is underdeveloped; while you mention that capturing moments is good, the argument lacks depth. To improve, you should provide more detailed reasoning and clearer examples that directly support your position. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not fully synthesize the points made in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In additional' or 'first and foremost, why i am agree'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second body paragraph where the transition from the general trend to the specific example of your village is abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track the flow of arguments. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help create a smoother, more logical flow between your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'good', 'place', and 'beautiful'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'actual place secenario' and 'old parents' (likely meaning 'elders'). Some phrases are awkward, such as 'they made by stone'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'claves' for caves, 'abot' for about) restrict the range of vocabulary. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise nouns, adjectives, and collocations related to travel and cultural heritage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a limited range of grammatical structures, with a heavy reliance on simple sentences. Attempts at complex sentences are often marred by errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and word order (e.g., 'they are capture the photoes', 'we should not to visit'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with frequent missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. These errors occur throughout the text and occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To improve, you need to practice constructing more complex sentences accurately and pay closer attention to basic grammatical rules like verb forms and sentence structure.

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