Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many cities, people are spending less time with their families because they are working longer hours and have increasingly busy lifestyles. What problems can this cause, and what solutions can you suggest?

In many urban areas, individuals are investing less time with their loved ones as they are working overtime and have hectic schedules. This can cause weaken family bonds and deteriorating the physical and mental health, whereas these issues can be addressed by doing flexible working hours and priortizing family time.

This first effect of working longer hours is distant in the family relationships. Spending more time on work cause less time for family and it may create misunderstanding among family members, which further weaken the bond and emtions. For example, couple those are investing extra hours on work might not have a time to discuss their family responsibilities and about their children's progress, that will reduce their emotions and family relationships. Another impact is on both physical and mental heath. Individuals those are working longer time may neglect their health as they may not have enough time to do physical exercise and getting heathy meals during working time. Along with this, working extra hours makes people feel more stressful and anxious. Therefore, individuals may feel isolated and less active due to extra workload.

However, these problems can be tackled by doing work with flexibility. Employer can offer differnet working hours patterners such as remote work, hybrid work schedules, and limited number of hours. This will help employees to focus on their physical and mental health. Moreover, workers can switch off their working mode after working hours, intead of it; they can spend time with their family and children, which assist them to feel more engertic and refresh.

In conclusion, extra shifts on work may make individual more isolated, reducing family bonding and less physically active, mentally stressed. These problems can be solved by having flexibile hours on the workplace and spending more time with families to strenghten their relationships.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt provided to you asked about people visiting well-known places to take photographs without looking at the place, but your essay discusses the problems and solutions related to people spending less time with their families due to work. Because you did not address the actual task question, the response cannot be assessed for task achievement in relation to the prompt. You must ensure you read the specific instructions provided in the exam carefully before beginning your writing.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with clear paragraphing and a standard introduction-body-conclusion structure. You use cohesive devices such as 'For example', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, because the content does not match the prompt, the progression of ideas is irrelevant to the task. Within the context of the text you wrote, the flow is generally clear, though some transitions are slightly mechanical. To improve, focus on ensuring that your topic sentences directly relate to the specific question asked in the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'hectic schedules', 'deteriorating', and 'responsibilities'. There are some word-choice errors, such as 'distant in the family relationships' (should be 'distance in') and 'working time' (should be 'working hours'). You also have some minor spelling issues like 'priortizing' and 'differnet'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to express your ideas clearly, it lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher band scores. Focus on learning collocations and ensuring correct word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Individuals those are working longer time may neglect their health as they may not have enough time...'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Spending more time on work cause...') and incorrect relative clauses ('Individuals those are working...'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the frequency of errors in basic grammar structures prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and refining your use of complex sentence structures.

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