Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

As the social media came to the life, everyone has become more vocal about what everyone does and moreover like to exhibit through posts everywhere. A comparison of someone, unknown to us has become predominently important for whom we look upon.

A similar trend to this is the Banff Lake resort that everyone is visiting, taking pictures and posting on Instagram. Although there is nothing much hyped about it, people follow social media influencers. They fail to live in the moment and instead take more pictures and in acting happy.

A positive impact to this is that, anyone who has an access to social media is updated on the current trends and spending culture but on the other hand, it also makes someone jealous who cannot achieve it. While this current trend has both positive and negative impacts, I would like to highlight the negative impact of wastage of money and resources, spending time in unproductive tasks and also not enjoying the current situation but focusing more on pictures and faking rather than enjoying.

A few years ago, this was not normal all, imagine me taking a picture of what I eat or do in a day before this trend became viral. People would think I am mad, but as time changes, the trend changes and does the society. But we fail to live in the moment while we are taking a remembrance of the moment with us.

Let's not try to impress a society that does not provide us with anything while we avoid our family and people around us.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the trend and whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention social media influence and the desire to exhibit one's life, the explanation of why people prioritize photos over the experience itself is underdeveloped. The position is clear, but the arguments lack depth and specific supporting evidence. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and provides a more detailed explanation of the underlying psychological or social drivers behind this behavior.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical progression between ideas is sometimes disjointed. For example, the transition between the Banff Lake example and the discussion of positive/negative impacts is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'A positive impact to this is that' or 'A similar trend to this is'. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next would significantly enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your meaning, but there are several instances of awkward phrasing and imprecise word choices. Phrases like 'came to the life', 'nothing much hyped about it', and 'taking a remembrance' are unnatural. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and occasional errors in collocation prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and idiomatic expressions in context, rather than using literal translations or overly casual phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('the trend changes and does the society'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction ('A comparison of someone, unknown to us has become predominently important'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and refining complex sentence structures will help improve your score.

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