Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
It is true that majority of individuals prefer to visit eminent places in order to take pictures of themselves these days. This essay intends to discuss the reasons behind this phenomenon such as status maintainance along with its negative and positive impacts.
To commence with, there are plethora/plenty of reasons to this trend. The major reason is that people want to maintain their status. To explain, nowadays, people are well educated and they are doing white color jobs in the domain of education, science, engineering and many more. As a result, they want to show their status in the society by posting photos of different famous places online. Another reason could be exploring distinct locations to enhance knowledge. To elaborate, technology plays a vital role in everyone's life, when people see the famous places online, they become enthusiastic to explore the beauty of that places. This means they want to get the first hand experience by visiting such places and upload the photographs on the social media platforms.
However, this trend can be both positive or negative. The main positive outcome of this trend is enhancing the knowledge about different well-known places. To illustrate, people can not only show their wealth to the society but also get deeper information about the places. For example, when people visit the Taj Mahal in Agra, they not only capture pictures but also enrich their knowledge about the history of that place by communicating the local citizens and guiders. While, the negative might be hurting the sentiments of others. This means that when people visit any place without getting information, they might do not follow the rules and regulations.
In conclusion, I reiterate that there are many reasons behind it but the positives such as getting knowledge is worth, while the negatives cannot be neglected.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and the evaluation of whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While you provide reasons such as status maintenance and curiosity, the explanation of the 'positive' aspect is slightly contradictory, as you argue that people visit places to learn, yet the prompt specifically highlights that they do so 'without looking at the place.' The conclusion is also quite brief and lacks a strong summary of your main arguments. To improve, ensure your supporting examples directly address the specific premise of the prompt rather than general tourism behavior.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To commence with,' 'To elaborate,' and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'there are plethora/plenty of reasons to this trend,' where the preposition is slightly awkward. The flow between sentences is generally smooth, but the connection between the 'positive' argument and the prompt's premise could be more tightly managed to ensure the paragraph remains focused.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'phenomenon,' 'enthusiastic,' and 'communicate.' However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation. For example, 'white color jobs' should be 'white-collar jobs,' and 'communicating the local citizens' is incorrect; it should be 'communicating with local citizens.' The use of 'plethora/plenty' suggests a lack of decision in drafting. While you attempt some less common vocabulary, the inaccuracies in collocation prevent a higher score. Focusing on natural word pairings will help improve your precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'majority of individuals' (needs 'the'), 'beauty of that places' (should be 'those places'), and 'they might do not follow' (should be 'they might not follow'). While these errors do not impede overall communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher band score. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement, the use of articles, and the correct formation of negative verb structures. Increasing the variety of complex sentence types while maintaining accuracy will also be beneficial.
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