Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In today's world, there are many visitors just want to visit any new place for clicking photographs and making videos of themselves, without watching at the place. I thing the main reason behind this is social media and it has more pros than cons.
The first and foremost interesting reason is people influence a lot from social media. In detail, taking photographs and posting those pictures on social platforms It cannot only a way of saving memory But can also a best way to become a popular in social media community. For instance, recently one cute girl visited the famous Taj Mahal and posted her image with the same place. After that, people likes a lot her on social media and she became a famous influencer on media.
Moreover, while visiting new destination, just clicking own pictures instead of looking the beauty of the place It has positive trend. To explain, new generation attract a lot to use social media because there are many social media application on internet which gives a pay for uploading a new images in daily life. For example, Mr. Shah recently visit new place at abroad and due to that he has uploaded lots of videos and images through the Instagram app and got too many likes and comments. As a result, the app gave him ten thousand indian rupees.
In conclusion, more and more individuals visit famous locations to take photos of themselves, without seeing the place because of the more attraction towards earning money from the social media and get popularity on social media platforms. Those are the reasons why I would say it is positive trend.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and the writer's opinion on whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. The argument that this is a 'positive trend' because people can earn money from social media is a narrow perspective that lacks depth. While the prompt is addressed, the supporting examples, such as the 'cute girl' at the Taj Mahal or 'Mr. Shah', are anecdotal and lack the analytical depth required for higher bands. To improve, you should explore broader societal implications rather than focusing solely on individual financial gain.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is a basic attempt at using cohesive devices like 'The first and foremost', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion'. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical and sometimes awkward, such as in the second paragraph where the transition between the general idea and the example is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the logical progression within paragraphs could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally would enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher score. There is a reliance on simple, repetitive phrasing such as 'clicking photographs', 'famous places', and 'social media'. Some word choices are unnatural, such as 'people influence a lot from social media' (should be 'are influenced by') and 'gives a pay' (should be 'provides payment' or 'monetizes'). While the meaning is clear, the lack of sophisticated collocations and the presence of errors in word formation limit the lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'there are many visitors just want to visit' (missing relative pronoun 'who'), 'It cannot only a way' (incorrect verb usage), and 'people likes a lot her' (subject-verb agreement and word order). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate better control over complex structures and reduce the frequency of basic grammatical errors.
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