Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this modern era, numerous people visit popular places to take pictures of themselves without looking at the place or not knowing the facts about the place they visit. In this essay, I will discuss why this is happening and is this positive or negative trend.

There are several reasons behind it. First and foremost would be reliable means of transportation, cheaper rates and easy accessible. Secondly, people also try to impress society while posting different pictures of different places they visit to show they have visited plenty of places. Moreover, this trend is growing more and more among young people as they feel like it's cool to post pictures of several places without having enough knowledge about that place.

For instance, recently one of my friend visited the Royal Grant Museum, which is very popular in France, and he posted a picture of it. So, after a few days we met at the party and I asked him did you see the famous painting of Da Vinci and he was completely unaware of it. He said that he just went to take some pictures of it as he wanted to upload it on social media as it was the world-famous museum.

In conclusion, this is a negative trend. As a lot of people do spend a huge amount of money to visit well-known places but end up just taking photographs of themselves instead of knowing about the place they visited or the history behind it. It would not be worthy just to take pictures to please someone or to post on social media.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and the opinion on whether it is positive or negative. However, the development is somewhat limited. While you provide reasons like transportation and social media validation, the explanation remains superficial. The example of the friend at the museum is relevant but could be better integrated to support the argument more robustly. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with deeper analysis rather than just listing reasons. The position is clear throughout, but the depth of the argument is currently at a mid-level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the flow of ideas. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'First and foremost', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' to signal transitions. However, the connection between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing could be more sophisticated. For instance, the transition between the reasons and the personal example feels a bit abrupt. To improve, try to use a wider range of cohesive devices and ensure that the logical progression between sentences is smoother and less reliant on simple list-like connectors.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'social media' and 'well-known places'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there is a reliance on simple, repetitive phrasing (e.g., 'different places', 'visit'). There are also minor collocation issues, such as 'easy accessible' instead of 'easily accessible'. To achieve a higher score, incorporate more precise and varied vocabulary, such as 'superficial engagement', 'validation', or 'cultural significance', to demonstrate a more flexible control of language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist throughout the text. For example, 'is this positive or negative trend' should be 'whether this is a positive or negative trend', and 'one of my friend' should be 'one of my friends'. Additionally, there are issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to improve accuracy.

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