Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Furthermore, this way of life encourage a comparison in people. Owing to the fact that everyone on social media begin comparing their life and happiness with other on the basis of pictures provided there. For illustrate, according to cambridge University recent study a growing number of persons are under depression due to inferiarity complex develope for using online platform. Therefore, judging someone's life happiness as content on social plateform through pictures damaging lives in today's limes.

However, Given that the fact that people visit different places to take photographs on renawned sites and monuments which can provide achance to experience various places. As people might not travel such places in life and learn about them. thus, it can enhance life experiences of people and broaden their horizon. Despite that this aspect generate revenue for the countries as escalating number of people travelling nowadays.

To resume, Though this trend has offers negative effects of saciety as well as individuals, this also enhance gowth of nations. I would suggest that it would be great if people should also spend time differatly in exploring the natual and famous places while clicking perfect postures on these exotic and places.

with the advancement of technology,

undeniably a burgeoning number of people visiting

across the globe just to uploads pictures

on online platforms and this trend is

increasing in recent times. I consider this

a negative trend which is encouraging a

ignorance in persons who are not enjoying

nature.

To commence, There are numerous of effects of this

way of life. The first and foremost is the

not living the moment and creating memories of

those tourist sites. Since people are interested

in taking photos of themselves on varied natural

place, they are surely not relishing those precious

moments. As a result, they are not certainly

living a life whilst merely occupied with the

stress of posting visually perfect on social media,

they are counting more number of places they

visited for example, my cousin told me that she

is traveling different exotic places nationally or

internationally just to post pictures on their

Instagram for followers and likes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and whether it is positive or negative. However, the structure is fragmented, with the introduction appearing at the end of the text, which makes the position difficult to follow. While ideas are presented, they are not fully developed or logically connected. For instance, the mention of 'Cambridge University study' is a good attempt at support, but the lack of clear paragraphing and the disjointed flow hinder the overall development of the argument. To improve, ensure a clear introduction, body paragraphs with distinct points, and a cohesive conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The organization is the weakest aspect of this essay. The text is presented in a non-linear fashion, with the introduction appearing after the body paragraphs. This lack of logical progression makes it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'However', 'To resume'), they are often used incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. Paragraphing is inconsistent and confusing, as the text seems to be composed of separate, disconnected blocks. A more structured approach with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion is essential for a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary range is adequate for the task but shows significant issues with accuracy and collocation. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'inferiarity', 'saciety', 'renawned', 'differatly') and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'counting more number of places', 'perfect postures'). While the student attempts to use more sophisticated vocabulary like 'burgeoning' and 'exotic', the misuse of words often impedes clarity. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic words and practicing collocations to ensure that words are used in their natural, idiomatic context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that often affect readability. There are frequent subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'this way of life encourage', 'everyone... begin comparing') and errors in sentence structure, such as sentence fragments (e.g., 'For illustrate, according to cambridge University recent study...'). While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, these are often marred by errors in punctuation and tense usage. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofread carefully to eliminate simple errors in agreement and word form.

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