Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Today is a modern era in which everyone is using social network sites for example, Instagram, Facebook, TikTok and Snapchat. Due to this, people have a lot of influence of others who post their daily life things as they are very rich and having fun while travelling well-known places which make other people jealous of thier life's so they try to copy them them by going there not for fun or to enjoy but just to click pitures and post online to get views and show their status. Moreover, people get paid by these apps if they get a lot of views, likes and shares on thier pitures so it also become a easy source of income. That's why a lot of people are trying to become famous on these apps. For instance, my cousin brother also got influenced by this and he started doing this so he can earn some money for his own expenses. On the other hand, some have only one motive to visit well-known places making memories with their families or friends that they want to capture in their photographs for their future refrances.

I believe that it is a negative trend because people get so much lost in clicking pictures that they don't admire the beauty of the place. What is the history of that place why it is so famous that results in people are forgetting how to admire things and also losing their curiosity about the knowing the places they visit. Overall, it has a negative effect on people according to me but it also gives an opportunity to earn money.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and the evaluation of whether it is positive or negative. You clearly identify social media influence and financial gain as primary drivers. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the mention of your cousin is a relevant personal example, but it lacks depth. The discussion on whether the trend is negative is also brief. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the consequences of this behavior, perhaps discussing the impact on cultural heritage or the psychological effects of 'performative' travel, rather than just stating that people lose curiosity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into two main paragraphs, which is a logical structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'For instance', and 'On the other hand' to link ideas. However, the flow within paragraphs is occasionally mechanical. Some sentences are run-on, such as the first sentence of the second paragraph, which makes the progression of ideas feel slightly disjointed. Improving the use of transition words to connect sentences more fluidly would enhance the overall coherence. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to guide the reader through your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'influence', 'status', and 'curiosity'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and spelling errors, such as 'thier' instead of 'their', 'pitures' instead of 'pictures', and 'refrances' instead of 'references'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensuring accurate spelling of common words. The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and variety required for higher band scores.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it also become a easy source'), punctuation errors, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'people get so much lost'). The sentence structure is often repetitive, relying heavily on 'and' to connect clauses. While the meaning is generally clear, the persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limit the score. You should focus on proofreading for basic errors and practicing the construction of complex sentences to improve accuracy and variety.

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