Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the modern era, most of the people are visiting famous places to take selfies in front of them and forget to explore the beauty of that region. This reason behind this is social media, individuals finds happiness by posting those pictures on social medias are increasingly prevalent nowadays. In my perspective this seems a negative trend.

First of all , social media plays a crucial role in this situation. Today most of the people are vising the famous locations only to capture their own pictures and posting on social medias rather than seeing that particular place. If individuals does not get interact with others they will be less socialized, leads to loneliness and social anxiety. Moreover, this trend causes the breakage of privacy of individual. For instance, if some one is posting a photo of their current location , other will came to know you were at that particular place and cause loss of privacy.

Furthermore, visiting the different tourist palaces is one of the most important step to get to know about the tradition and culture of that place. If we are capturing photos of ourselves instead of exploring this, we are loosing a golden chance in our life. Likewise, the availability of good smartphones is an important factor, which can be used effortlessly by anyone to capture images.

However, clicking pictures have a few positive side also such as creating a memory. Photographs that are clicked in front of the famous spots will become a precious memory in the future. For example, I had picture of myself that I clicked in front of Burj Khalifa, is still with which I values most and gives me memories when I saw it.

In conclusion, taking pictures ourselves will definitely gives us a memory of that visit, nevertheless, this trend have significant serious concerns such as loss of privacy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and the opinion on whether it is positive or negative. The ideas are relevant, such as the influence of social media and the loss of cultural exploration. However, the development is somewhat uneven. The argument regarding privacy is a bit tangential to the main issue of 'not looking at the place,' and the conclusion is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, you should ensure that each paragraph focuses strictly on explaining why the trend exists or why it is negative, providing more nuanced examples that directly link the act of taking photos to the loss of the travel experience.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. There is a basic attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'First of all,' 'Moreover,' 'Furthermore,' and 'In conclusion.' However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and some transitions feel forced. For example, the jump from social anxiety to privacy in the second paragraph lacks a smooth logical bridge. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'other will came to know you were at that particular place,' where the subject 'other' is imprecise. Improving the variety and precision of linking words would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the message to be conveyed clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'socialized,' 'social anxiety,' and 'tradition and culture.' However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'breakage of privacy' (should be 'invasion of privacy') and 'vising' (spelling error for 'visiting'). The use of 'tourist palaces' is likely a misuse of 'places.' To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that your vocabulary is used in the correct context to avoid these minor inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('individuals finds,' 'individuals does not get interact,' 'this trend have'), tense inconsistencies ('other will came to know'), and article usage errors ('I had picture of myself'). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your points. To achieve a higher band, you need to demonstrate better control over basic grammatical rules and increase the frequency of error-free complex sentences.

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