Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Nowadays, trend of photography is high among masses, especially in youngster's. This is extremely negative development, because people forget to acquire knowledge of stunning places while clicking pictures of themselves.
One potential reason of happening this trend is that majority of folks including seniors and juniors are incredibly addicted to social media. Whenever they visit to explore well known places, they capture the photos and upload them on social platforms such as Instagram, Facebook or What's app to gain more views and popularity. For illustration, recently a survey was conducted by a famous newspaper which provide data that 2 out of 10 humans have perfect knowledge about traditions of their culture. Therefore, social media is one of the major issue behind this trend. Another concern is lack of knowledge of parents about their cultures. For instance, in this twenty one century, most of guardians are modern and they are not attached to their past due to hectic schedule. Thus, if parents had spent more time to teach their kids about their norms, numerous "Young ones" would have been gotten more information about their roots.
One potential negative point of following photography is that masses are unable to gain fundamental learning of particular famous place, which break them from their norms and traditions. A good example of this would be that there is legendary place in Delhi, Agra which is called Taj Mahal. Countless tourists visit every year to see the beauty of this building, but the major drawback is that 7 out of 10 do to know the history of this place. Instead of obtain history of this building, they prioritize the images. So, people have lost bucket of awareness that is no remarkable for the future of upcoming generation.
In conclusion, Although clicking photos assist folks to creating memories with their loved ones, it also make them knowledgeless person in this highly competitive era, thus information about history of specific place is more powerful weapon in this modern society.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and the evaluation of whether it is positive or negative. The position is clear from the introduction. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The argument regarding parents and cultural knowledge feels slightly tangential to the core issue of social media-driven tourism. Furthermore, the example of the Taj Mahal is relevant, but the claim that '7 out of 10' tourists do not know the history is an unsupported generalisation. To reach a higher band, ensure that all supporting points directly link back to the prompt's focus on the 'selfie culture' and provide more nuanced explanations rather than relying on questionable statistics.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. Cohesive devices such as 'For illustration', 'Another concern', and 'In conclusion' are used to guide the reader. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'One potential reason of happening this trend'. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the link between parental guidance and the selfie trend is not fully established. The flow between sentences is generally functional, but the progression of ideas could be smoother with more sophisticated transitions.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of awkward phrasing or incorrect word choices, such as 'knowledgeless person', 'bucket of awareness', and 'no remarkable'. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'social platforms' and 'traditions', the overall range is limited. Some collocations are unnatural, such as 'acquire knowledge of stunning places' or 'break them from their norms'. To improve, the student should focus on learning more natural collocations and avoiding literal translations of phrases that do not exist in English.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include article misuse ('the trend of photography', 'in this twenty one century'), subject-verb agreement ('This is extremely negative development'), and incorrect verb forms ('would have been gotten'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the sentence structure often feels repetitive. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy and proofreading for article usage would significantly enhance the quality of the writing.
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