Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
in this modern era,people are obsessed with travelling new aesthetics places which is very popular in all around the world.However,i will explain this thought in following paragraphs with negative and positive effects with more details.
in the first hand,People only visit those places which is very well known such as Vietnam, Bali etc.Most of the youngsters visit this place from social media videos and shorts which is positive sign that social platform are encouraging peoples to visit this kind of place.
For instance, in 2024, 80% of Indians visited Bali by watching instagram videos.most of the youngsters love to visit such kind of places with their friends and family.
Secondly, sometimes people peoples visit those places and takes pictures where they don’t have any knowledge or information. to explain this, many youngsters only travel for click photos for their social profiles and status but they don’t care about budget and other things.for example, My friend visited Vietnam with her partner but when they were start travelling they believed that they are wasting time and money.So, this is negative point for travellers without any information.
On my perspective, people should travel those places where they can reduce their stress and feel more refreshments with perfect budget and planning.For example,Natural places are more attractive places for visit instead of visiting urban places.
to conclude,people should look places before they book their trips and my arguments prove that natural places are more specious than well-known places and younger also can attach with natural places.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the trend and offering an opinion on its nature. However, the development of ideas is limited. The explanation for why people visit these places is somewhat superficial, relying on a brief mention of social media. The discussion regarding whether it is a positive or negative trend is inconsistent; the essay mentions both but lacks a clear, sustained position. The examples provided, such as the statistic about Indian tourists in Bali, feel anecdotal and lack depth. To improve, you should expand on the underlying psychological reasons for this behavior and provide a more cohesive argument regarding the impact of this trend.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'in the first hand' instead of 'on the one hand'. Transitions between ideas are often abrupt, and the logical progression within paragraphs is weak. For example, the transition from discussing social media to the negative aspects of travel lacks a smooth connection. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the concluding paragraph does not effectively summarize the main points or restate the position clearly. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There is some repetition of basic terms like 'places' and 'youngsters'. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, such as 'aesthetics' and 'social profiles', but the usage is sometimes imprecise or grammatically incorrect, such as 'travelling new aesthetics places'. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'specious' (which means misleading) when you likely meant 'spacious' or 'spectacular'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensuring words are used in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people... is', 'social platform are'), missing articles, and incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'when they were start travelling'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several instances of missing spaces after commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.
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