Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In this modern era, technology has become increasing day by day, so everyone has electronic gadget to keep their memories with the help of technology. Nowadays there are number of people who like to visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place. I will discuss the reasons behind it and discuss if it is positive or negative development in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin with, there are numerous reasons behind why individuals like to take their photographs on famous places. First and foremost, nowadays, everyone likes to post their photographs and videos online to get reviews and to became famous in public. For example, there are many people who visit different famous restaurant try their food and post videos online which helps to get them name and fame. Secondly, nowadays, it is like a trend when there is one person do that others also want to do the same with knowing about place and anything they just want to take photographs and like to show their family and friends.
On the other hand, this trend has both negative and positive development. Firstly, if we talk about positive side, it is helpful for individual to get knowledge about different places and get name and fame among public, but if we talk about negative side, sometime people take photographs on religious place in unappropriated way, which putt bad impact on others and some people follow them without knowing about place.
In conclusion, no doubt taking photographs and videos on well-known places and post them online and share with family and friends give individuals name and fame, but people should need to know about the place before taking pictures if it is appropriate or not and what effect it put on public.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and the evaluation of whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the reasons provided—seeking fame and social pressure—are relevant but could be explored with more depth. The discussion on whether the trend is positive or negative is also quite brief and lacks a clear, sustained position. While the prompt is addressed, the arguments are somewhat superficial, and the conclusion does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, you should provide more detailed examples and ensure your personal stance is clearly articulated throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with,' 'First and foremost,' and 'On the other hand.' However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the phrase 'with knowing about place' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow. The transition between the reasons and the evaluation of the trend could be smoother to create a more cohesive argument. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally will enhance the overall structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'famous,' 'good,' and 'bad,' and there are some issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'putt bad impact' instead of 'has a negative impact' and 'unappropriated way' instead of 'inappropriate manner.' While your meaning is generally clear, the lack of more sophisticated or varied vocabulary limits your score. To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and idiomatic expressions related to social media trends and cultural behavior.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'technology has become increasing day by day,' 'everyone has electronic gadget' (missing article), and 'there are number of people.' There are also issues with verb tense and subject-verb agreement, such as 'when there is one person do that.' While you attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly article usage and pluralization, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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