Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A trend recently has been noticed that most of the individuals who check out the popular places prefer to take their pictures at those sites, instead of exploring the area. In my opinion, this is due to increasing influence of social media in our lives. In my perspective, this tendency has severe negative impacts on someone's life, such as being unable to know the history or related events to that specific area, taking no pleasure from natural landscapes, and over-sharing perosnal life events.

First of all, this drift has a significant drawback that they would be unable to know the historical events related to that community. One reason to go to a famous ancient place is to recognize the local community, their culture, and their way of living. For example, Chillas community has their own distinct cultural background and religious festivals. Therefore, one can deprive himself by not exploring the local area.

Secondly, by taking their photograph, one can deprive himself of the pleasure of natural beauty. Moreover, many people in Pakistan visit the northern areas, beacause of the heavenly, eye-catching countryside.

However, individuals now take less interest in hiking and examining the surroundings.

Last but not the least, this perspective under the influence of modern globalisation has led to over-sharing every event of their life. This is because of the new social apps, like Tiktok which have easy accessibility and usage. In addition to this, everyone want to have more viewers to get called as the Tiktoker Star.

In conclusion, this increasing trend of not exploring the place, but taking one's own picture has a negative impact. It can cause serious personal relationship problems in long run. This current has more negative influence on teenagers, because they are not mature enough to know the outcomes. Responsible use of social media can prevent this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and the evaluation of whether it is positive or negative. The position is clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While the point about social media is well-integrated, the example regarding the 'Chillas community' is slightly underdeveloped and lacks a clear connection to the main argument about photography. The conclusion introduces a new point about 'personal relationship problems' which was not previously mentioned in the body paragraphs, making the argument feel slightly disjointed. To reach a higher band, ensure that all main points are introduced in the introduction and fully supported with cohesive examples throughout the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' are used to guide the reader. However, the use of some cohesive devices is slightly mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between the discussion of natural beauty and the mention of Pakistan's northern areas is a bit abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'this perspective under the influence of modern globalisation', where the link to the previous paragraph is somewhat tenuous. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task. You have used some topic-specific terms like 'globalisation', 'landscapes', and 'accessibility'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'check out the popular places' (better: 'visit popular tourist destinations') and 'get called as the Tiktoker Star' (better: 'gain recognition as a social media influencer'). There are also a few spelling errors, such as 'perosnal' and 'beacause'. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure consistent proofreading to eliminate minor spelling slips.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you successfully use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally affect the flow. For example, 'everyone want to have' should be 'everyone wants to have', and 'one can deprive himself' is used repeatedly in a way that sounds slightly unnatural. There are also minor punctuation and article errors throughout the text. Despite these errors, the meaning is always clear, and the grammar does not impede communication. Increasing the variety of complex structures and focusing on subject-verb agreement will help elevate your score.

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