Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A trend recently has been noticed that most of the individuals who check out the popular places prefer to take their pictures at those sites, instead of exploring the area. In my opinion, this is due to increasing influence of the social media in our lives. In my perspective, this tendency has severe negative impacts on someone's life, such as being unable to know the history or related events to that specific area, taking no pleasure from natural landscapes, and over-sharing perosnal life events.

First of all, this drift has a significant drawback that they would be unable to know the historical events related to those community. One reason to go to a famous ancient place is to recognize the local community, their culture, and their way of living. For example, the Chillas community has their own distinct cultural background and religious festivals. Therefore, one can deprive himself by not exploring the local area.

Secondly, by taking their photograph, one can deprive himself of the pleasure of natural beauty. Moreover, many people in Pakistan visit the northern areas, because of the heavenly, eye-catching countryside.

However, individuals now take less interest in hiking and examining the surroundings.

Last but not the least, this perspective under the influence of modern globalisation has led to over-sharing every event of their life. This is because of the new soical apps, like Tiktok which have easy accessibility and usage. In addition to this, everyone want to have more viewers to get called as the Tiktoker Star. This current has more negative influence on teenagers, because they do not mature enough to know the outcomes.

In conclusion, this increasing trend of not exploring the place, but taking one's own picture has a negative impact. It can cause serious personal relationship problems in the long run.Nevertheless, responsible use of social media can prevent this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and your opinion on whether it is positive or negative. Your position is clear from the introduction. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat uneven. While the point about social media and the desire for validation is well-made, the argument regarding the 'Chillas community' is a bit disconnected from the main topic of photography at tourist sites. To improve, ensure that every example directly supports your main argument about why people prioritize photos over the experience itself. The conclusion is a bit abrupt and introduces a new idea about 'personal relationship problems' that was not previously discussed in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and you use transition signals such as 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. For instance, the transition to the example about the Chillas community feels abrupt. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as the use of 'this drift' and 'this current', which could be more naturally phrased. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be strengthened by using a wider variety of linking words beyond simple sequence markers.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'globalisation', 'accessibility', and 'distinct cultural background'. There are some minor spelling errors ('perosnal', 'soical') and some awkward collocations, such as 'get called as the Tiktoker Star' and 'this current has more negative influence'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit your score. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that your word choice is consistently natural and accurate throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'everyone want to have' (should be 'wants') and 'they do not mature enough' (should be 'they are not mature enough'). There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While you attempt complex structures, the frequency of these minor errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of auxiliary verbs will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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