Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A trend recently has been noticed that most of the individuals who check out the popular places prefer to take their pictures at those sites, instead of exploring the area. In my opinion, this is due to the increasing influence of social media in our lives. In my perspective, this tendency has severe negative impacts on someone's life, such as being unable to know the history or related events to that specific area, taking no pleasure from natural landscapes, and over-sharing personal life events.

First of all, this phenomena has a significant drawback that they would be unable to know the historical events related to those communities. One reason to go to a famous ancient place is to recognize the local community, their culture, and their way of living. For example, the Chillas community has their own distinct cultural background and religious festivals. Therefore, one can deprive himself by not exploring the local area.

Secondly, by taking their photograph, one can deprive himself of the pleasure of natural beauty. Moreover, many people in Pakistan visit the northern areas, because of the heavenly, eye-catching countryside.

However, individuals now take less interest in hiking and examining the surroundings.

Last but not the least, this perspective under the influence of modern globalisation has led to over-sharing every event of their life. This is because of the new soical apps, like Tiktok, which have easy accessibility and usage. In addition to this, everyone wants to have more viewers to get called as the Tiktoker Star. This trend has more negative influence on teenagers, because they do not mature enough to know the outcomes.

In conclusion, this increasing trend of not exploring the place, but taking one's own picture has a negative impact. It can cause serious personal relationship problems in the long run.Nevertheless, responsible use of social media can prevent this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and the evaluation of whether it is positive or negative. The position is clear from the introduction. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While the impact of social media is well-identified, the discussion on historical knowledge and natural beauty is a bit repetitive and lacks depth. The example regarding the 'Chillas community' is specific but could be better integrated to explain why tourists specifically ignore the place itself. Overall, the response covers all requirements, but the supporting arguments could be more thoroughly extended to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph has a central topic, and the progression of ideas is generally easy to follow. Cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' are used to signal the structure. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as the use of 'they' in the second paragraph without a clear antecedent. The concluding sentence about 'personal relationship problems' is a bit abrupt and not fully supported by the preceding arguments, which affects the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'globalisation' and 'accessibility', but there are also some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'get called as the Tiktoker Star' and 'this phenomena' (which should be 'this phenomenon'). The range is sufficient to discuss the topic, but more precise and sophisticated lexical choices would be needed to reach a higher band. Spelling is generally accurate, though 'soical' is a minor slip.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the writer demonstrates an ability to construct complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'this phenomena has') and article usage. Some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'one can deprive himself by not exploring'. Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors, such as the missing space after the period in the final paragraph. Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear throughout, and the communication is not impeded.

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