Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A trend recently has been noticed that most of the individuals who check out the popular places prefer to take their pictures at those sites, instead of exploring the area. In my opinion, this is due to the increasing influence of social media in our lives. From my perspective, this tendency has severe negative impacts on people's life, such as being unable to know the history or related events to that specific area, taking no pleasure from natural landscapes, and over-sharing personal life events.

First of all, this phenomenon has a significant drawback that they would be unable to know the historical events related to those communities. One reason to go to a famous ancient place is to recognize the local community, their culture, and their way of living. For example, the Chillas community has their own distinct cultural background and religious festivals. Therefore, one can deprive themselves by not exploring the local area.

Secondly, by taking their photograph, one can deprive themselves of the pleasure of natural beauty. Moreover, many people in Pakistan visit the northern areas, because of the heavenly, eye-catching countryside.

However, individuals now take less interest in hiking and examining the surroundings.

Last but not the least, this perspective under the influence of modern globalisation has led to over-sharing every event of their life. This is because of the new social apps, like Tiktok, which have easy accessibility and usage. In addition to this, everyone wants to have more viewers to get recognised as the Social Media Influencer. This trend has more negative influence on teenagers, because they are not mature enough to know the outcomes.

In conclusion, this increasing trend of not exploring the place, but taking one's own picture has a negative impact. It can cause serious personal relationship problems in the long run. Nevertheless, responsible use of social media can prevent this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and your opinion on whether it is positive or negative. Your position is clear from the introduction and maintained throughout. The ideas are relevant, such as the influence of social media and the loss of cultural appreciation. However, some points could be more fully developed. For instance, the example of the 'Chillas community' is mentioned but not clearly linked back to how the act of taking photos specifically prevents one from learning about their festivals. To reach a higher band, ensure that every example directly supports the argument being made rather than just stating a fact.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'In addition to this' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more balanced. For example, the second body paragraph is quite short compared to the others. Additionally, the referencing in the third paragraph ('this perspective') is a bit vague. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'phenomenon', 'globalisation', and 'accessibility'. There are some minor issues with collocation and word choice, such as 'check out the popular places' (which is slightly informal) and 'deprive themselves by not exploring' (which is slightly awkward phrasing). You attempt to use less common vocabulary, which is good, but ensure these words are used in the correct context to avoid minor inaccuracies. Expanding your range of topic-specific collocations related to tourism and social media would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'A trend recently has been noticed' (passive voice is a bit clunky here) and 'the Chillas community has their own' (subject-verb agreement). Some sentences are slightly fragmented or lack smooth connectivity. To improve, focus on ensuring subject-verb agreement and refining your use of articles. While you attempt complex structures, they are not always error-free. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you move into the higher band range.

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