Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A trend recently has been noticed that most of the individuals who visit the popular places prefer to take their pictures at those sites, instead of exploring the area. In my opinion, this is due to the increasing influence of social media in our lives. From my perspective, this tendency has severe negative impacts on people's lives, such as being unable to know the history or related events to that specific area, taking no pleasure from natural landscapes, and over-sharing personal life events.

First of all, this phenomenon has a significant drawback that they would be unable to know the historical events related to those communities. One reason to go to a famous ancient place is to recognize the local community, their culture, and their way of living. For example, the Chillas community has their own distinct cultural background and religious festivals. Therefore, one can deprive themselves by not exploring the local area.

Secondly, by taking their photograph, one can deprive themselves of the pleasure of natural beauty. Moreover, many people in Pakistan visit the northern areas, because of the heavenly, eye-catching countryside.

However, individuals now take less interest in hiking and examining the surroundings.

Last but not the least, this perspective under the influence of modern globalisation has led to over-sharing every event of their life. This is because of the new social apps, like Tiktok, which have easy accessibility and usage. In addition to this, everyone wants to have more viewers to get recognised as a social media influencer. This trend has more negative influence on teenagers, because they are not mature enough to know the outcomes.

In conclusion, this increasing trend of not exploring the place, but taking one's own picture has a negative impact. It can cause serious personal relationship problems in the long run. Nevertheless, responsible use of social media can prevent this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and your opinion on whether it is positive or negative. Your position is clear from the introduction and maintained throughout. The ideas are relevant, particularly the link between social media validation and the decline in authentic travel experiences. However, some points could be more fully developed. For instance, the example of the 'Chillas community' is mentioned but not clearly linked back to the core argument of why people fail to engage with history. Expanding on the 'how' and 'why' of these consequences would elevate the response to a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use transition signals such as 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive. For example, the transition 'Last but not the least' is a common cliché that could be replaced with more sophisticated linking phrases. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as the pronoun 'they' in the second paragraph, which lacks a clear antecedent. Overall, the progression of ideas is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'phenomenon', 'globalisation', and 'accessibility'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'deprive themselves by not exploring' (which is slightly awkward) and 'this perspective under the influence' (where 'perspective' is not the most precise word for a trend or phenomenon). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, the precision is occasionally lacking. To improve, focus on using collocations that sound more natural in an academic context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'A trend recently has been noticed that most of the individuals...' (which is wordy and slightly unnatural) and 'the Chillas community has their own' (subject-verb agreement). Some sentences are slightly fragmented or lack smooth flow, such as 'One reason to go to a famous ancient place is to recognize the local community, their culture, and their way of living.' Despite these errors, the meaning is always clear, and the punctuation is generally functional.

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