Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Secondly. Just because people are oftenly going on some unique places that does not meam to be safe for everyone if you dont know about everything of that particular place it is safe to search about check real time photos rewies about that place for instance we went to an island for it's famous greenery but the time we reath there it is about we went for tulips garden at niagafall but by the time we reath there so mamy visitors already there and there for were only few tulips bulb was only there we even pay to see that but it is all waste of mongy and time
So in my opinion you should not go anywhere where most of people are alreddy going so oftenly.
These days most of the people visit well-known places to capture themshelves not knowing about the place This is totaly negative trend I will brifly explain about this in upcoming paragraph.
first of all it you don't know about the place is not safe to go anywhere in this situation for example it you are going on mantains or hill station you do not know about their height What kind of animals could be there, insects, and other danger too for instance me and my friends were on a roadd trip to tobermory island we went there in water there was a Snakes everywhere. we search that place on google but still there were no sign of danger there that is why it is not good to go anywhere you dont know about
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response struggles to address the prompt effectively. While it touches on the topic of visiting well-known places, it fails to provide a clear, structured argument regarding why this is happening or whether it is a positive or negative trend. The ideas are disjointed and focus heavily on personal anecdotes about travel safety rather than the psychological or social reasons behind the trend of 'photo-tourism.' The position is not clearly maintained, and the response lacks the depth required for a higher band. The content is largely anecdotal and does not engage with the prompt's core requirements in a logical or analytical manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is erratic, with sentences starting mid-thought and ideas jumping between topics without transition. There is a lack of cohesive devices, making the flow of the essay difficult to follow. The use of 'Secondly' at the start of the text and the fragmented nature of the paragraphs indicate a lack of planning. The progression of ideas is not clear, and the reader often has to guess the connection between the personal stories provided and the prompt's questions. The overall arrangement is not coherent.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'oftenly' instead of 'often', 'meam' for 'mean', 'rewies' for 'reviews', 'reath' for 'reached', 'mamy' for 'many', 'mongy' for 'money', 'alreddy' for 'already', 'themshelves' for 'themselves', 'totaly' for 'totally', 'brifly' for 'briefly', and 'mantains' for 'mountains'. These errors are pervasive and sometimes impede communication. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, relying on basic, informal, and often incorrect word choices throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is highly problematic, with frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and verb tense. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, such as 'Just because people are oftenly going on some unique places that does not meam to be safe for everyone if you dont know about everything of that particular place it is safe to search about check real time photos rewies about that place'. There is a lack of control over basic sentence construction, and the frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and word order make the text difficult to read. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always inaccurate.
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