Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It has been observed recently that a large amount of population across the globe are travelling to the famous religious places to get themselves photographed without even considering the impact on the location they visit. This has become a substantial issue and I strongly believe that this is a negative trend which will be discussed in below paragraphs.

The one of the main reason why the people are visiting these religious places to get themselves a photograph is the Fear of missing out that has been caused by the social media and it's creating a major impact on the ecology of these places. For example In 2016 there was a wave in Indian population to visit the kedarnath a holy place to worship lord Shiva at the altitude of 1800 feet in between the mountains. Many people were visiting this place because it had a good accommodation, had a amazing scenery and can have a dual benefit of getting a chance to worship and enjoy the beautiful flora and fauna the place had to offer. In the same year [redacted phone] people visited the place with has the capacity of only 50000 people. This caused the climate to get warm and which in result lead the ecology of the place to alter. This caused a cloud burst and which further caused the flood in whole valley swiping out the whole place and many people lost their lives due to the massive calamity.

There was also a trend that stared from the movie good bye by a very famous Indian actor Amitabh. In this movie they gave a message to Indian people that in order to get the salvation after death all the ashes must be dumped in river Ganga. The people started going to the Benares ghats with is where the gang floes and started dumping the ashes in the river which caused the river almost biologically dead. There were tremendous efforts and spending made by government to then clan the river as the lives of Indian population were dependent on this river.

I strongly believe that the adoption of the social media and the trends where people are having fear that might miss out on the trends and will not have a picture or videos has lead to a irresponsible tourism which is causing these negative impacts on the environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for the trend and whether it is positive or negative. You clearly state your position that it is a negative trend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The example regarding Kedarnath is quite detailed, but the connection between taking photographs and the specific environmental disasters described is not fully articulated. The prompt asks about the behavior of taking photos without looking at the place, but your arguments shift toward general over-tourism and pollution. To improve, ensure your examples directly support the specific phenomenon of 'photo-centric tourism' rather than general environmental issues.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt at logical progression. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, 'The one of the main reason' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow. Transitions between ideas, such as the shift from the Kedarnath example to the movie-related example, feel abrupt. While the overall structure is coherent, the internal cohesion within paragraphs needs more variety and precision to guide the reader more smoothly through your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'ecology,' 'salvation,' and 'calamity.' However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'a large amount of population' (should be 'a large proportion of the population'), 'swiping out' (should be 'wiping out'), and 'clan the river' (should be 'clean the river'). These errors occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, focus on using collocations more accurately and refining your word choice to sound more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the accuracy of your writing. Common issues include article misuse ('the Kedarnath,' 'the Indian population'), subject-verb agreement ('which has the capacity'), and awkward phrasing ('which in result lead the ecology'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Increasing your control over basic grammar and punctuation will significantly improve the clarity and professionalism of your writing.

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