Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In our modern society, tourism became a photograph session for the people rather than the tourist place itself. People are more likely to document themselves and ignore the view that is right in front of them. This creates a notion that people are not present in the moment and can be seen as negative quality a person can have.

Social media creates a public platform for digitized photo album as a proof they visited a popular place. Even if they include the place in the background, the subject is still the people in the photograph. It became a marketable trend for tour agencies to include photo opportunities. An individual wants the public to notice their tour and whereabouts rather than appreciating what they visited.

Nowadays, people tend to prioritize their own experiences. It is not wrong to have a personal preference in their tours. Nevertheless, a person can not fully immerse themselves in a place if they can't focus on their environment. Mount Fuji is a remarkable tourist destination in Japan. If people can look at it without taking pictures of themselves, they can make

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it contains only 185 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay addresses both parts of the prompt—explaining the reasons for the trend and expressing an opinion on its nature—the arguments are underdeveloped. The final paragraph is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence, which prevents a full exploration of the topic. To achieve a higher band, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are fully extended with relevant examples and reach the required length to demonstrate a complete argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay shows a basic level of organization with clear paragraph breaks. There is a logical progression of ideas, moving from the phenomenon to the reasons and then to the evaluation. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat limited and occasionally mechanical. For instance, the transition between the second and third paragraphs feels abrupt. Because the essay is incomplete, the overall structure is compromised, making it difficult to assess the full flow of the argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring a complete conclusion would enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'notion', 'digitized', 'marketable', and 'immerse'. These words are generally used correctly and help convey your meaning. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'tourism became a photograph session' (should be 'has become') and 'negative quality a person can have' (could be more precise). The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate your ideas, but it lacks the sophistication and flexibility required for higher bands. Expanding your range of collocations and idiomatic expressions would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While there are some grammatical errors, such as 'tourism became' instead of 'has become' and 'a person can not fully immerse', these do not significantly impede communication. Punctuation is generally accurate, though the incomplete ending leaves the final sentence structure unresolved. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of complex grammatical structures, such as conditional sentences or passive voice, and ensure consistent verb tense usage throughout your response.

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