Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Now a days,it has become a common trend to visit historical and well-known places to take photographs of themselves.In my opinion,it is a positive trend because visiting historical places helps us to understand about the diverse past of people who lived their life decades ago.By visiting those places we have a chance to know about their culture,traditions and the way how they lived.Morever it also helps to reflect the architectural brilliance and intelligence of the people who built those places.By taking the photos of such places we had a memory in our mobiles about those places.I don’t understand about the negative trend of this thing.It’s a negative trend only in that case if we don’t know about the place.But If a person takes interest about the place and its past then it’s a positive trend.I,myself had a chance to visit the “Lahore Fort”also known as “Shahi Qilla”.It reminded me about the glory of great Mughals and their architectural brilliance.It was built by Shahjahan for his wife.The inner room was decorated with mirrors.It was an eye-catching view.I was thrilled to see such a beautiful room.It was the best part of my visit.I took pictures of myself because I wanted to remember it for my entire lifetime so i captured that moment in my camera.It is happening because people want to capture the beautiful moments of their life and nature.They want the memory saved so that they can re-enjoy the moment.People should do this often so when they become old they should see those memories and remember about the beautiful places and their trips there.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the trend and providing a personal opinion on whether it is positive or negative. However, the development is somewhat uneven. The explanation for why people take photos is a bit repetitive, focusing heavily on personal memory rather than the broader social phenomenon of 'selfie culture' or social media influence. While you provide a personal example of the Lahore Fort, the argument could be strengthened by discussing the impact of this trend on the experience of the site itself, as the prompt specifically mentions people taking photos 'without looking at the place'. The position is clear, but the depth of analysis is limited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into a single block of text, which significantly hinders readability and coherence. IELTS tasks require clear paragraphing to separate the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. While there is a logical flow of ideas, the lack of paragraph breaks makes the progression feel dense and cluttered. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'But', but they are sometimes used in a mechanical or repetitive way. To improve, you should group related ideas into distinct paragraphs to guide the reader through your argument more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'architectural brilliance' and 'diverse past', which are effective. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there is a reliance on simple phrasing. There are also minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'reflect the architectural brilliance' (which should be 'reflect on' or 'showcase') and 'don’t understand about the negative trend' (which is slightly unnatural). Expanding your range to include more precise academic vocabulary would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent errors in punctuation and grammar. For example, there are missing spaces after commas and periods throughout the text (e.g., 'themselves.In', 'past of people who lived their life decades ago.By'). Additionally, there are minor errors in tense and article usage, such as 'we had a memory' instead of 'we have a memory' and 'the glory of great Mughals' (which requires 'the' before 'great'). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points.

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