Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In today's fast moving online world, it is preferred to showcase their entire life on social media. Since, A substantial number of people visit celebrated places just to capture themselves, without even anticipating the environment of the places. In my perspective, I assert that this trend will bring a negative impact on the youth.
To begin with, clicking pictures has commonly witnessed by diverse population. It is observed that many people are fascinated to travel and photograph themselves, later post them on social media platforms just to gain views and popularity. Although clicking pictures make the moments memorable, but making it as a habit and constantly capturing each and every phase of life will make it dangerous. For instance
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 119 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely limited. While the introduction identifies the trend and states a position, the body paragraph is incomplete and lacks the necessary depth to fully address the prompt. The essay stops abruptly mid-sentence, meaning the second part of the question (whether it is a positive or negative trend) is not adequately supported with examples or reasoning. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and ensure all parts of the prompt are fully explored.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization with an introduction and a body paragraph. However, the abrupt ending prevents a coherent progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with' and 'Although', but the overall structure is fragmented. The lack of a conclusion and the incomplete nature of the text make it difficult to follow a logical flow. To improve, ensure you have a clear introduction, at least two well-developed body paragraphs, and a concluding summary, using a wider range of linking words to connect your thoughts smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, with phrases like 'fast moving online world' and 'celebrated places'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'anticipating the environment' (which does not fit the context of visiting a place) and 'clicking pictures has commonly witnessed' (which is grammatically incorrect). The range of vocabulary is limited by the short length of the response. To achieve a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your word choices are natural and contextually appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'Since, A substantial number...' is a sentence fragment, and 'clicking pictures has commonly witnessed' is passive voice used incorrectly. There are also issues with punctuation and sentence structure, such as the misuse of 'Although' in the second paragraph, which creates a redundant structure when paired with 'but'. While there is an attempt at complex sentence structures, the frequent errors in basic grammar and syntax limit the score. Focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and avoiding sentence fragments.
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