Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In thesedays, individuals utilizing more technological devices for interaction with others in the comparison of previous time. This is because of positive aspects following with instant communications, cheaper, convenient and useful for work as well education and negative impacts are less face to face interactions, misunderstanings and overdependency.
The major developments are quick interactions, because of high speed networks a person can chat through calls, videocalls which is convenient and cheaper way via applications such as whatsapp, instagram and facebook. For instance, international students can video chat with their parents easily and within less time. Moreover, it is crucial method for employees and students because of google meet workers connect with overseas companies for future growth and pupils use Youtube or AI tools for their education. Therefore, technology is a valuable source of living.
The detrimental effects are online communications. When someone sends a message online, there is no face to face interaction which do not show real emotions and it sometimes lead to misunderstandings between realtionships. Another consequence is overdependency. People are getting addicted to mobile phones and laptops due to which they are forgetting their real world, they are swiping reels online all night and it loss their pricious time which they have to spend with their loved ones, It is weaking the personal bonds. Hence, it is disadvantageous.
In conclusion, although individuals are becoming social which contribute to misunderstandings, weaking relations and less face to face communications, it has plenty of benefits such as instant interactions, cheap and convenient, favourable in work and education which results in advantanges outweigh the disadvantages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks about people visiting well-known places to take photographs without looking at the location, yet your essay discusses the general pros and cons of technology and online communication. Because you did not address the specific question asked, the response fails to meet the requirements of the task. While you have written an essay about technology, it does not answer the 'why' or the 'positive/negative' trend regarding photography and tourism. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your ideas directly relate to the specific scenario provided rather than writing a generic essay on a related topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is a basic attempt at logical progression. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Therefore', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, because the content is irrelevant to the prompt, the overall coherence is undermined. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is mechanical, and the referencing is sometimes unclear due to the lack of a central theme that connects to the actual task. To improve, focus on ensuring that each paragraph develops a specific point that directly supports your main argument regarding the prompt's topic.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You use basic terms like 'positive aspects', 'negative impacts', and 'valuable source'. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'thesedays', 'realtionships', 'pricious', and 'weaking'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey simple ideas, it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on very common, everyday language and struggle with accurate collocations. To improve, try to incorporate more academic vocabulary and pay closer attention to spelling and word forms, such as using 'relationships' instead of 'realtionships'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'In thesedays, individuals utilizing more technological devices...', which lacks a main verb. You also have errors in subject-verb agreement, such as 'it sometimes lead to misunderstandings' and 'it loss their pricious time'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofread your work to correct common errors in tense and pluralisation.
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