Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In this modernised world, it is increasingly common for individuals to visit well-known places with the intention to capture photographs, rather than exploring their destination. Social media influence and peer pressure are the two prominent factors behind this trend and I believe it is an entirely negative trend because it reduces people's appreciation for cultural and historical values and raises safety concerns.
One of the primary reasons why individuals are inclined towards taking photographs is the growing influence of social media. This is largely because these social platforms, such as Instagram and Facebook, share aesthetic pictures to gain attention through likes and comments. Thus, with this strategy, adventurous individuals are more likely to be influenced to visit those places to recreate similar pictures with the same backgrounds. As a result, individuals visit those popular destinations to click pictures instead of exploring the historical significance of those particular places. For example, in India, many youngsters nowadays visit Taj Mahal, which was built by Shah Jahan in a memory of her beloved wife. Despite of its captivating historical significance, it is reported that this places loses its historical significance due to excessive tourism with photographic mindset.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 194 words. This significantly impacts the development of the response. While you clearly state your position and address both parts of the prompt (reasons and opinion), the ideas are underdeveloped. The second paragraph introduces the Taj Mahal example, but the essay ends abruptly without a conclusion or a discussion of the 'safety concerns' mentioned in the introduction. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and examples, and ensure you provide a concluding paragraph to summarize your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay demonstrates a logical flow, with a clear introduction and a body paragraph that follows a coherent structure. You use cohesive devices such as 'One of the primary reasons', 'Thus', and 'As a result' to link ideas effectively. However, because the essay is incomplete and lacks a conclusion, the overall progression is interrupted. Paragraphing is used, but the lack of a full essay structure makes the organization feel unfinished. To reach a higher band, ensure you have a balanced structure with distinct body paragraphs and a clear concluding summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, using terms such as 'modernised world', 'prominent factors', 'aesthetic', and 'captivating historical significance'. These choices are generally appropriate and help convey your meaning clearly. There are minor errors, such as 'in a memory of her beloved wife' (should be 'in memory of his beloved wife') and 'this places loses' (should be 'these places lose'). While the vocabulary is sufficient for the task, it lacks the variety and precision required for higher bands. Expanding your use of collocations and more sophisticated academic vocabulary would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For example, 'Despite of its captivating historical significance' is incorrect (it should be 'Despite its' or 'In spite of its'). Additionally, there is a subject-verb agreement error in 'this places loses'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on mastering prepositions and ensuring subject-verb agreement to improve your accuracy.
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