Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In an modern era, numerous people like to travel to vast number of cities to explore the beauty of nature. They usually travel with their families, friends, and with their spouse. exploring is not bad when we are going with our knowns. Travelers try to catch every memory in their phones, cameras or other digital media which every they feel easy to carry. This easy will articulate the benefits of visiting places in the above paragraphs. Choosing benefits does not mean there are no drawbacks of not enjoying the creature.

Firstly, few individuals like visiting new location just to keep them relax and relief to their mind, soul and body. To be more precise, everyone has some sort of stress, anxiety going on in their life. As, they are working hard to achieve what they want in their life. sometimes things become harder to achieve and just to relax and give some space their visit place as to keep memories in their phones. they are not going for enjoying the beautiful places but to keep as good note to show someone. For example, visitor's gone to see Banff, as it the most beautiful place with a lot of beaches, parks and mountains. They took photographs just to capture the beauty of that place. Hence, its an good idea and become an good memory we can see when ever we want.

Secondly, there are the influencers who like to record each and every part in order to show to public. Like, youtubers, there main aim is to explore an record where they go to make to it publicly available so that other people can also get influence and would like to go. For instance, earlier, very less amount of people know about Taj Mahal which is in Agra. with the help of recording or from the vloggers people get to know about the fabulous and beautifully designed. Thus, taking photographs is the good part as it help other people to see those who are not able to go their.

To conclude, clicking picture of spots is good we have an access we can see whenever we want and help us in reminding those days that we spent their with our relatives and family members.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the trend and offering a perspective on whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the explanation of why people take photos is repetitive, focusing heavily on 'memories' without exploring the psychological aspect of social media validation or the 'fear of missing out' in depth. The position is generally clear, but the argument lacks nuance. To improve, you should expand on the implications of this trend rather than simply listing reasons, ensuring that each point is fully supported with clear, logical reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'This easy will articulate' are confusing and do not effectively link ideas. Additionally, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. While there is a logical progression from the reasons to the conclusion, the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak due to awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents would significantly enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'exploring is not bad when we are going with our knowns' and 'not enjoying the creature' (likely a misuse of 'scenery'). The repetition of basic words like 'good' and 'beautiful' limits the impact of your arguments. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and topic-specific vocabulary related to tourism, digital culture, and social media influence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'there main aim is'), incorrect article usage (e.g., 'In an modern era'), and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'visitor's gone to see Banff'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage would be a beneficial first step.

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