Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this Period of technology, everyone has been influenced by technological gadgets such as smartphones, Ipads, etc. Numerous individuals are now becomes photogenic who always love to capture their movements while visiting a attraction rather than enjoying the beauty of the place. In this piece of paper I will explicate all the reasons and shedding a light on my own view point.
Analyzing the statement and explaining further, there has been multiple factors why people prefer to take their own photographs while visit of new places. The most precedence one is to revive their memory. In other words, during this time where eve
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required word count of 250 words, reaching only 103 words. Because the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, it fails to address the prompt fully. The task requires an explanation of why this trend is happening and an evaluation of whether it is positive or negative. While the introduction attempts to set up these points, the body paragraph is truncated, meaning the arguments are not developed or supported. To improve, you must ensure you write a full response that explores both parts of the question with sufficient detail and examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows an attempt at logical structure with an introduction and the start of a body paragraph. However, because the text is incomplete, it is impossible to assess the overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used in a basic way, such as 'In other words' and 'In this piece of paper', but the abrupt ending prevents a coherent flow. To achieve a higher score, you need to complete your arguments and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas smoothly throughout the entire essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. Phrases like 'In this Period of technology' and 'shedding a light on my own view point' are slightly unnatural. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'becomes photogenic' instead of 'become obsessed with photography' or 'photogenic'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and academic vocabulary that fits the context of the topic, rather than relying on informal or slightly misused expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are several grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. For example, 'everyone has been influenced' is correct, but 'Numerous individuals are now becomes' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'are now becoming'. Additionally, 'while visit of new places' should be 'while visiting new places'. The sentence structures are relatively simple, and the frequent errors in verb tense and preposition usage indicate a need for more careful proofreading. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb forms will help improve your accuracy significantly.
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