Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In modern world everyone have a smartphone, and they wants to update every moment on soical media. they just follow the trend they see people doing this they also want to try at once. At this point they don't even realise they were adicted.

Taking pictures every where have influance our generation in both ways positive and negative as well. first some people take pictures for their families, who's not come with them, or not able to come. Some people take photos for the memory. when thery were old or reitred from their work they sit in house they have some good memories in the face of photographs. this type of reasons have a positive impact on the new generation. On the other hand, that person who is totally addicted of smartphone they just click photos, to get in touch of their phone. they see views of nature also from his phone. they where not feel the acutal value of the place. This type of person setting a negative trend in the market. Which is not good for health and environment.

Last year i travel to Muree. its a very beautiful place. The air is so fresh, also the views is breathtaking but i have my friend with me his name is Ali. They just do one thing in the whole time. they have their smartphone on his hand they clicking photos. They took almost thousand clicks. I don't remeber they sit a bit for feel the value of place, air, as well as nature. I feel very bad for him. I'm surprised what they actual doing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the trend and whether it is positive or negative. You provide clear reasons, such as social media validation and memory preservation, and offer a personal example to support your argument. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The discussion on the negative impact is a bit repetitive, and the conclusion is missing, which prevents a more comprehensive summary of your position. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that you fully explore the implications of your points rather than just listing them.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. For example, phrases like 'At this point' and 'In the face of' are used incorrectly or awkwardly. There is also a lack of transition between the general discussion and your personal anecdote about your friend Ali. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') would help the flow of your ideas significantly. Additionally, ensure that pronouns like 'they' and 'he' have clear antecedents to avoid confusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use simple words like 'good', 'bad', and 'things'. There are also several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'in the face of photographs' (instead of 'in the form of') and 'get in touch of their phone' (instead of 'stay connected via their phone'). To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'digital documentation', 'mindfulness', or 'superficial engagement', and pay closer attention to how words naturally pair together.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('everyone have', 'they wants'), tense inconsistency ('who's not come', 'when thery were old'), and article usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'that person who is totally addicted of smartphone they just click photos'. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses. Practising the construction of complex sentences using relative clauses and conjunctions will also help you demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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