Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Acording to me visit place not only a photograph the viste place it's a about experience feel peaceful to the nature view different types of tree weather people experience new things knowledge about that thing images ect yet most of people are only take the picture but not experience the place i know taking pictures is important but you should to see beauty of the place nature ect . According to me it's nagative trend experience feel is adorable thing it's remove you depression frustration ect you change your mind set to show yourself to another place it's about knowing knowledge about place where you visited.see different people from different country iconic view nice thing alot of people just take picture not looking carefully place where they gone but the menifested people are actually enjoy everything they not obsession about photographs as well but they love to see world enjoy moment. So that is my opinion what do you think about it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 162 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the prompt asks for reasons and an opinion on whether the trend is positive or negative, the arguments are presented in a fragmented, repetitive manner. The ideas regarding the benefits of travel (e.g., 'feel peaceful', 'remove depression') are mentioned but not sufficiently extended or supported with clear examples. The response addresses the task partially, but the lack of depth and the failure to meet the length requirement prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is no clear structure, such as an introduction, body paragraphs, or a conclusion. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused; for example, the transition 'So that is my opinion' is informal and does not effectively link the previous points to a conclusion. The flow of ideas is disjointed, and the lack of logical sequencing makes the text feel like a series of loosely connected thoughts rather than a cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'nice thing', 'good', and 'beauty'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'menifested people' (likely meaning 'mindful') and 'obsession about photographs'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas or opinions clearly. The student struggles to use precise language, often resorting to informal phrasing that is not appropriate for an IELTS writing task. Significant improvement in range and accuracy is required.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('visit place not only a photograph'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structure ('you should to see'). The text consists mostly of simple, error-prone sentences with very few attempts at complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with run-on sentences and a lack of proper sentence boundaries. These persistent errors make the text difficult to read and demonstrate a limited control over basic grammatical rules.

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