Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
A large group of people are self-focused when taking photographs instead of their surroundings is of subject of discussion. This behavior shows the influence of technology which makes them feel attractive , otherwise, some thinks such behavior is a form of disconnection to the real connection behind the lens.
On the one hand, people who self capture themselves are inclined to the influence if technology by using high-end phones which makes them look and feel beautiful. For instance, whenever a person uses their phones by doing selfies they develop confidence and appreciate their true beauty. So, appreciation starts when you see yourself on the screen.
On the other hand, some people think it has negative impact as it disconnects the person to her surroundings. By constantly disconnecting one self inhibits her social awareness to flourish. Such behavior has a domino effect like if constant interaction are missed , an inferior complex may develop and later on affect social interactions.
In my opinion, self-captured photos should be just fine if it is timely and does not dismissed the essence of capturing the beautiful moments of life. I think technology has greatly affected people's behavior but it must haven't replaced the real connections. Furthermore, it is nice to appreciate the goodness of technology and maximize the use of it, like social media platforms and other apps, but our surroundings is much more important like our family
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
Tinutugunan ng sanaysay ang parehong bahagi ng prompt, tinutukoy ang mga dahilan para sa trend at nag-aalok ng opinyon kung ito ba ay positibo o negatibo. Gayunpaman, ang tugon ay kulang sa 250-word minimum, na naglilimita sa lalim ng mga argumento. Ang mga ideya ay may kaugnayan ngunit nananatiling medyo mababaw; halimbawa, ang paliwanag kung bakit kumukuha ng selfies ang mga tao ay maaaring palawigin gamit ang mas tiyak na mga halimbawa bukod sa 'confidence' lamang. Dahil ang sanaysay ay kapansin-pansing kulang sa haba, ang pagbuo ng mga ideya ay limitado, na pumipigil sa mas mataas na score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
Ang sanaysay ay nakaayos sa malinaw na mga talata, at mayroong lohikal na pag-unlad mula sa introduksyon hanggang sa mga body paragraph at konklusyon. Ang mga cohesive device ay ginagamit, gaya ng 'On the one hand' at 'On the other hand', na tumutulong sa paggabay sa mambabasa. Gayunpaman, ang ilang transisyon ay medyo mekanikal o awkward, gaya ng 'Such behavior has a domino effect like if constant interaction are missed'. Ang pagtukoy (referencing) ay paminsan-minsang hindi malinaw, na nakakaapekto sa pangkalahatang daloy ng argumento.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Ang bokabularyo ay karaniwang sapat para sa gawain, ngunit kulang ito sa katumpakan at saklaw na kinakailangan para sa mas matataas na band. May ilang awkward na collocation at pagpili ng salita, gaya ng 'self-captured photos' sa halip na 'selfies' o 'self-portraits', at 'does not dismissed' na mali sa gramatika. Bagama't malinaw ang kahulugan, ang saklaw ng bokabularyo ay limitado, at may pag-asa sa mga pangunahing parirala upang ipahayag ang mga ideya tungkol sa teknolohiya at sosyal na pag-uugali.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Ang sanaysay ay naglalaman ng halo ng simple at kumplikadong istruktura ng pangungusap, ngunit may mga madalas na pagkakamali sa gramatika na paminsan-minsang nakakahadlang sa pag-unawa ng mambabasa. Ang mga halimbawa ay kinabibilangan ng mga isyu sa subject-verb agreement ('some thinks', 'interaction are missed') at maling anyo ng pandiwa ('it must haven't replaced'). Ang bantas ay hindi rin pare-pareho, lalo na sa paglalagay ng kuwit. Bagama't hindi lubos na natatakpan ng mga pagkakamali ang kahulugan, ang mga ito ay sapat na madalas upang maiwasan ang mas mataas na band score.
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