Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.
Why do you think this is happening?
Is it a positive or a negative trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Through different forms of print and digital media, we come across reports that nowadays majority of people are prefer to visit famous places to take photographs of themselves even without looking at the place.This can be attributed to some factors.As far as,my opinion is concerned,it is a detrimental.
The most prominent reason is that nowadays many people are like to visit unique places to explore it more.This view exits as they really like to visit their with their kith and kin whenever they get free time even they like to do adventure activities.And they like to take lots of photos of them and upload them on social media.Moreover,I can not ignore the fact that they like to make memories with their near and dear ones.This hypothesis is buoyed in the Idea that they like to preserve that photos because whenever they look that photos,they feel happy about that even they can enjoy a lot during visit new places.For instance,Bali, Maldives,Thailand and many more.Apart frim these,they can aware about new and different culture.
My stand can be justified with some intresting observations.The most convincing point in this regard is that sometime people are face plenty of problems during visit this kind of places.By this I mean that sometime they may get injuries because they do not look places which they visit even they go there without any planning that's why they face problems related to food, accommodation, safety and many more.Instead of safety,they only focus on their enjoyment.Consequently,sometime their life will be in jeopardize.
All in all, future will unfold many surprises for us.The need is to be proactive and plough ahead with optimism.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The candidate addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing why people visit famous places just to take photographs and providing a personal opinion on whether this is a positive or negative trend, concluding that it is detrimental. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the explanation of why people visit these places relies heavily on vague generalisations about social media and making memories without deep elaboration. Furthermore, the reasoning regarding the negative trend focuses broadly on safety and lack of planning, but lacks specific, well-developed examples, mentioning only a list of countries like 'Bali, Maldives, Thailand' without contextualising how photography habits specifically apply there. Overall, the task is addressed, but the depth of support places this in the Band 6 category.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response has an overall coherent structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion, although the paragraphing could be better managed. Cohesive devices are frequently mechanical or misused, such as 'This hypothesis is buoyed in the Idea that...' and 'Apart frim these', which disrupt the natural flow. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and spacing/punctuation issues (such as missing spaces after commas and periods throughout the text, e.g., 'concerns,it', 'is a detrimental.') detract from the readability of the essay. Progression is somewhat repetitive, pulling the score down towards the Band 5.5 to 6.0 range, fitting best into Band 5.5 rounded to 6.0 for overall arrangement.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical resource is limited and demonstrates noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and spelling. The candidate attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'detrimental', 'kith and kin', and 'jeopardize', but these are often used inaccurately or awkwardly, for instance stating 'it is a detrimental' (missing a noun) and 'their life will be in jeopardize' (instead of 'jeopardy'). Other spelling and form errors include 'frim', 'intresting', and 'sometime' instead of 'sometimes'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic meaning, the frequency of errors places it firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic complex forms that are frequently faulty. There are persistent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'majority of people are prefer to visit', 'many people are like to visit', 'they really like to visit their with their kith and kin', and 'people are face plenty of problems'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after punctuation marks and run-on phrasing. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and demonstrate a lack of control over complex structures, corresponding to a Band 5.0 level.
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