Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Photo is trand as well ae masses show our salfes on socal media. A number of people prasent days travling famous place to take photosute of themselves, without looking at the place. I shed some light on both sides positive or nagative pointes for which vinidication would be elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs.

To start with,there are many reasions people are take photos well-known places first is masses take pic and show on socal media as well as we take pic for happy memoryes.Secnod is everone try to stay opdate on socal media so they have tray to pic klick new places .

On the other hand people watch photos and thay have trye to take most papular place. some time racomend any friends and relatives so thay have trye visit there place.

Then some time we are visit for photo sute but there are many ricks l;ike there are whater not sute after that some place not suite with family as well as some place mor rick.

In conclusion after my all concidration people take pic and show social media and trye to famous. it is good but visit befour resarch abot place and after that visit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify social media and the desire to keep memories as reasons for taking photographs, and you attempt to discuss whether the trend is positive or negative. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: the positive or negative judgement is unclear, since “it is good” is not explained and is followed by advice to research a place before visiting. Several points, such as risks and whether places are suitable for families, are difficult to connect to the question. The response also does not meet the required minimum of 250 words, so there is limited space to explain and support your ideas. State your position clearly, then develop each reason with a specific example and explain its relevance to the trend.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “To start with,” “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” signal stages of the answer. However, the progression between ideas is not consistently clear. For example, the paragraph beginning “On the other hand” discusses recommendations from friends, but the contrast with the previous paragraph is not explained. The paragraph about “ricks” shifts to suitability for families without showing how this answers the question. Some linking phrases feel mechanical, and unclear references such as “there place” make connections harder to follow. Use one paragraph for reasons and another for your evaluation, and connect each sentence explicitly to the main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “social media,” “famous place,” “popular place” and “memories,” so the general subject can be recognised. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling errors make several phrases difficult to understand, such as “photosute,” “racomend” and “concidration.” Some word combinations are also unclear, including “stay opdate” and “take most papular place.” These issues strain the reader and limit the precision of your ideas. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling carefully; for example, use “take photographs at popular destinations” and “share travel experiences online” rather than repeating “take pic” and “show on social media.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form sentences and use basic connectors, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and the response relies mainly on simple or incomplete structures. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction appear in examples such as “people are take photos” and “they have tray to pic klick new places.” Missing or misplaced punctuation also makes some sentences run together, particularly in the opening paragraph. These problems sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “People take photographs because they want to share their trips online.” Then add a second, accurately formed sentence to explain each point, checking verb forms and punctuation.

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