Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this competative era, every individual like explore different place but the go there only for clickings the beauty of place rather then enjoy there and capture the beauty with eyes. according to my perspective,it has negative impact on living being which i will discussed in the upcomming paragraph.

To commence with,the humen bewing love to explore different place in this universe but for their photographynot for how beautiful can be nature is even they have a not single interest in pLACE For an instance everyone love to visit taj mahal but they capture the picture their for every single thing they have single interest for hiistory behind taj mahal. secondly, they active on social media such as instagram, facebook, twitter an more so for the likes and views they wandering here and there.

moreover, some prefer to navigate the for gaining everyone's interaction and compliments from all for an instance in school student share each other obout their exploration to make each other to feel jealousy

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify two relevant reasons: people want photographs for social-media attention (“likes and views”), and they may seek compliments or make others jealous. You also state that the trend has a negative impact. However, the response only partly answers the task: the negative position is not explained with clear consequences, and the reasons are briefly mentioned rather than developed with relevant support. The Taj Mahal example is difficult to interpret and does not clearly show how visitors fail to appreciate the place. The response is also 83 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to explain both causes and your evaluation. Develop each point with a clear explanation and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: an opening paragraph gives your view, and the next section introduces reasons, with “To commence with,” “secondly,” and “moreover” signalling sequence. This helps readers recognise the broad direction of the response. However, the ideas do not progress through a complete argument: there is no developed conclusion, and the final point about students sharing experiences is not clearly connected to the claim about negative effects. Some linking phrases are mechanical, while sentence boundaries and punctuation make relationships between ideas hard to follow. For example, the sentence beginning “To commence with” contains several points without clear separation. Use one paragraph per main reason, connect each explanation explicitly to your position, and finish with a concise conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “explore,” “social media,” “likes and views,” “compliments,” and “history.” These choices show that you can communicate the general subject and some motivations for taking photographs. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to understand, such as “clickings,” “photographynot,” “humen bewing,” and “navigate the.” Some phrases also do not express the intended meaning naturally, including “capture the picture their for every single thing.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than adding complex-sounding expressions. Proofread spelling and word forms, and learn topic phrases such as “seek online approval” and “appreciate the surroundings.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express more than one idea in a sentence and use basic sequencing, but sentence structures are limited and errors occur frequently. These include subject–verb agreement (“every individual like”), verb patterns (“love to explore”), and tense or modal forms (“which i will discussed”). Articles and prepositions are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “visit taj mahal” and “interest in pLACE.” Several sentences run together, and punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, which makes the intended relationships between clauses unclear. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “so,” or “although.” Check agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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