Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this era of ultra modernization, to take personal photos, significant number of individuals are visiting famous places, without even looking at the beauty of the sight. From my perspevtive, this is a negative trends because, people not only wants to show-off among peer group, but also wants to post on social media sites, which will result in leakage of ones privacy and result in serious crime. Forth coming chunk of writing will discuss this trend in details.

Comencing with the reasons, there are couple of reasons behind this trend, but first and foremost is show-off among peer group. In other words, nowadays this is become society symbol, to visit different places and clicking the pictures to show among the near and dears. For instance, younger generation like to show-off that we visite this and that place; however due to the lack of communication they cannot tell them personally, they click picture and upload on social media site, so that everyone knows about this. Apart from that, people wants to gatther views on social media site such instagram and ticktok.Hence, they click and upload pictures on social site by visiting at different places.

Moving toward the harmfull impact of this trend, one major impact is privacy leakage. This is mainly because, by giving regular update of personal life on social site, onces life no more stay private. Consequenly, many crimes increase such as money laundring, blackmailing and hacking. Research shows that, rate of felony has been become double as compared to the past, when this trend was not present, and everyones life was completly pivate. Therefore, clicking and posting regular pictures surge the crime rate.

In conclusion, according to the arguments mentioned above, although, taking pictures on different places donot have harmfull consequences, posting them regularly and showing to people on open social media accounts could become problem in future. Therefore, taking pictures is not a problem, but uploading them on social site can become problem.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions: you suggest that people post photographs to impress peers and attract attention online, and you state that the trend is negative because of privacy risks. The distinction in your conclusion—that taking photographs is not itself harmful, but posting them publicly can be—also gives your position some nuance. However, the explanation of why people ignore the place itself is only implicit, and the claimed links to money laundering, blackmail and hacking are not clearly explained. The research claim about crime doubling is broad and unsupported, so it does not provide convincing development. To strengthen the response, explain more directly how the desire to document or display a visit distracts people from experiencing it, and support the privacy argument with a specific, plausible example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on reasons, one on harms, and a conclusion. The progression from causes to consequences is easy to follow, and signposts such as “Comencing with the reasons” and “Moving toward the harmfull impact” help identify each section. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and also shows some control of progression. However, several transitions feel formulaic, and linking words sometimes connect ideas without making their relationship precise. For example, “Apart from that” introduces another reason, but the shift from peer approval to gaining views could be explained more smoothly. The conclusion repeats the main point rather than drawing the arguments together. Use clearer links between claims and examples, and vary transitions while keeping the paragraph structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “peer group,” “privacy,” “social media,” and “crime rate.” There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “first and foremost” and “Consequenly.” However, the range is limited by repeated wording around “click,” “picture,” and “social site,” while several inaccurate or misspelled choices make the writing less natural: “ultra modernization,” “show-off,” “gatther views,” and “pivate.” Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “society symbol” and “leakage of ones privacy.” Build a more accurate range of collocations for online behaviour and tourism, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would make your argument clearer without requiring more complex ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “when,” and “although,” and the reader can generally follow your meaning. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “individuals … is visiting” and “people not only wants” do not match the subjects, while “this is become society symbol” has an incorrect verb form and missing article. Some sentences also contain punctuation problems, such as the comma after “because” in the opening paragraph and the run-on structure in “Hence, they click and upload pictures …”. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas harder to process. Practise accurate agreement and verb forms first, then review articles and sentence boundaries in longer sentences.

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