Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

I am noticing a trend these days that many people are visiting famous places so that they can click pictures of them without visiting and experiencing those places. People just go there, then click pictures and come back without the actual experience that attractions have to offer.

This is happening because of social pressure and growing popularity of social media. People want to be seen and get noticed on social media platforms like facebook, instagram etc. They want to get attention of strangers, their friends so that their social reputaion would be either maintained or boosted. Many people go to famous places like Times Square in New York, Eiffel Tower in Paris, Taj Mahal in India to click pictures of them so that they can upload those photographs on dating applications like Hinge and Tinder.

I want to cite example of increasing trend of dating coaches on Instagram. One dating coach, Matt Artisan actually tells to their clients that Instagram and Facebook is like their resume which can tell that what kind of life they are leading. The more interesting their life appears, more people would be attracted to them for the purpose of dating.

I personally believe that this is a negative trend because people are no longer interested in visiting those well known places for experience and they have least interest in knowing about the importance, history and significance of the particular attraction. When I visited Niagara falls in USA, I encountered one person who had even hired professional photograph and he told that he want to show his relatives that he has gone to the USA.

I feel that people are now taking undue stress for social media attention because they think that they would be left behind in some unknown race. People are in some unexplained competition among their peer groups.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both questions: social-media pressure is presented as the cause, and you clearly judge the trend negatively. The examples of famous landmarks, dating apps, and your Niagara Falls visit make the response relevant and help explain your position. This meets the task well, with some elements showing the fuller development expected at the next level. However, the dating-coach example mainly repeats the idea that an attractive online image helps people gain attention; it could explain more directly how this changes visitors’ behaviour or affects their experience of a place. The negative effects are also asserted more than explored. Develop one or two consequences, such as reduced cultural understanding or distraction from the surroundings, to make the argument more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces the trend, explains a cause, gives examples, and then states a negative judgement. Paragraphing generally helps the reader follow this progression. Some links and references, however, are repetitive or not fully clear. For example, the opening repeats the idea of taking pictures without experiencing the place, and “those photographs” follows a long list of locations, making the reference slightly awkward. The final paragraph introduces social competition but does not clearly connect it back to the earlier explanation or develop it as a separate consequence. Use more deliberate links between cause, example, and effect, and avoid restating the same point in adjacent sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range to discuss the topic, including “social pressure,” “social reputation,” “significance,” and “undue stress.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and the examples make the vocabulary specific to the subject. There are some inaccurate or unnatural choices that limit precision: “click pictures” is less idiomatic than “take photographs,” while “get attention of strangers” needs a more natural expression. Spelling errors such as “reputaion” and inconsistent capitalisation of “Facebook” and “Instagram” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more natural collocations and precise wording, especially when explaining the effects of social media, while retaining the relevant topic vocabulary you already use.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including reason clauses with “because” and a relative clause in “one person who had even hired…”. Most sentences remain understandable, and errors rarely obstruct the message. Some grammatical inaccuracies are noticeable, however. In “he told that he want to show,” the reported clause needs a suitable construction and consistent tense; “he said that he wanted to show” would be clearer. “The more interesting their life appears, more people would be attracted” also needs a balanced comparative structure, such as “the more interesting their lives appear, the more people may be attracted.” Review articles, agreement, and tense consistency, and proofread longer sentences for punctuation and clause structure.

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