Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In my opinion, people nowadays are much interested in travelling different places in their free time to get relax from workload.

Most of the people, visited places just to take photographs of themselves to post on social media for publicity and showoff.

According to me, it is a negative trend, as people are comparing their life with social media influencers, they are making videos for their personal income, they will not show and share everything fare and guinine parts of their life.

But the youth, follow and believes them, try to do the same inspite of they don't have much income to go for the holiday, just for showoff they are wasting their time and money.

For instance, some of the people visits with their group of social media friends which is not safe. Recently, an incident happend in my state that one newly couple has visited a fort and took pictures, couple was happy and husband has more trust on his wife but his partner has an extra martial affair with some other guy. she insist him to come on the top of fort to take a picture and he easily accepted to go, then when he was giving a pose for picture, his wife's friend pushed him from the top of the fort and he died.

Thankfully, when his parents heard that the news that their son has died, they immediately request to do FIR and in that investigation, police with the help of CCtv's cameras found the murderer of their son which was his own wife and her friend planned to murder him.

So, it is very dangerous to visit places for just pictures, inspite of everyone should go with the family and the friends which they are wellknown as our life is precious.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that this is a negative trend and offer a possible reason: people take photographs for social-media attention and imitate influencers. The personal incident also illustrates your concern about safety. However, the response addresses the causes only briefly, and the discussion shifts from taking photos instead of appreciating places to social-media influence, spending, and a murder story. The example is unusually detailed and does not clearly establish that posing for photographs is generally dangerous. To develop the response more fully, explain why people prioritise self-images—such as seeking approval or documenting experiences—and weigh the effects on visitors’ appreciation of the location. Keep the example concise and connect it directly to your main argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable sequence: an opening, reasons for the behaviour, a negative judgement, an example, and a concluding recommendation. Paragraph breaks help separate some of these stages. However, progression is weakened by abrupt shifts, especially from social-media imitation to the long account of a crime, and the conclusion introduces family travel without clearly drawing together the earlier points. Linking phrases such as “According to me,” “But,” and “For instance” are used, but relationships between ideas are sometimes unclear or repetitive. Organise the body around one main reason and one clearly explained consequence, using each paragraph to develop a single point. Shortening the anecdote would also make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “social media,” “influencers,” “personal income,” and “precious,” which helps communicate your concerns about online attention and safety. However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make parts difficult to interpret: “get relax,” “showoff,” “fare and guinine,” and “extra martial affair.” Some expressions are repeated, particularly “pictures” and “showoff,” rather than replaced with more precise terms. Aim to use accurate phrases for the behaviour and its effects, such as seeking online approval, documenting a visit, or overlooking a destination’s features. Check spelling carefully and learn common word partnerships so your meaning is conveyed more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons and examples, but complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some passages difficult to follow. For example, “Most of the people, visited places” has an incorrect verb construction, while “the youth, follow and believes them” has subject–verb agreement problems. The long sentence beginning “Recently, an incident happend” combines several events without clear sentence boundaries, and shifts between past and present forms. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly attached reason or example. Review subject–verb agreement, past-tense narration, articles, and punctuation, then divide long explanations into shorter sentences.

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