Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place.

Why do you think this is happening?

Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I strongly believe that this is true, infact modern technology of photography will one day take over the importance of the well-known places without being photographed. To some extend this may affect positively for the owners who play a role of photoshop as their profession, as they only rely on the income gained through photoshoots.

Firstly, in this modernized world, technology in every product is rapidly growing faster. To illustrate this, a decades ago there we no fancy instruments such as phone or camera, where people use to visit famous places in terms of gaining knowledge of the place and experience the vibrant nature.

Although, this generation are more likely into social media. For instance, if it is a young generation or elderly people, everyones main intension to visit a well known place is to have a great photography of themselves and the first thing they will do is that they will post every picture on platforms like instagram, snapchat and more. Later on will impact to viewers of the post and will bring them to the same place and this cycle will make a loop.

Lastly, in this era photography has became a priority for everyone as it captures and stays in a form of memories. If a photo is clicked and saved in your phone, it makes it easier to show someone the same photo even after a long time.

To conclude, people choose to photoshoots ignore the true nature of the world. They spend their time by taking videography of the sunset instead of mesmerizing and enjoying with our own eyes. Also, photography has become a favorable hobbies of today's young generation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: you link the trend to social media and explain that photographs preserve memories, and your conclusion indicates that you see it negatively because people miss the experience of the place. However, the position is not consistently clear. The opening says the trend may benefit people who earn income from photoshoots, while the conclusion criticises it, without explaining how you weigh these effects. The reasons are also only briefly developed: for example, you describe people posting pictures and attracting others, but do not explain why taking selfies has become more important than engaging with the location. Develop a clear overall judgement and support each reason with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, several body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “For instance” and “To conclude” help show the intended structure. However, the progression between ideas is not always clear. The opening’s point about photo professionals is not carried through, and the paragraph beginning “Although” shifts from social media to a cycle of visitors without clearly connecting that cycle to your evaluation. Some linking phrases are awkward or incomplete, such as “Later on will impact to viewers,” which makes the relationship between ideas difficult to follow. Aim for one main point per paragraph, explain how each example supports it, and use clear references and transitions rather than relying mainly on formulaic signposting.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “social media,” “platforms,” “photoshoots,” “captures” and “memories,” and you attempt more specific expressions such as “vibrant nature.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For example, “owners who play a role of photoshop” does not clearly describe the people who benefit, and “favorable hobbies” is an unnatural phrase. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “intension” and “modernized.” Build a more reliable range of topic vocabulary and check that phrases sound natural in context; precise expressions will help you explain the trend and its effects more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “If a photo is clicked and saved in your phone,” and this gives you some variety. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make several ideas hard to follow. Examples include “a decades ago there we no fancy instruments,” “this generation are,” and the incomplete construction “Later on will impact to viewers.” Agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence structure need more consistent control. Some punctuation also creates awkward sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate sentences around one clear subject and verb, then add subordinate clauses only when you can maintain the grammar throughout.

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