Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You are a member of an International Students' club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world.

Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter

• offer to make a popular dish from your country
• describe what this dish is
• explain why it should be included in the event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Luis,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Luis,

I hope you are doing well, I am writing this letter to inform you that our club is organising an event to celebrate signature chines food around the world.I am the main member of student club. I make chines rice very delicious

. This is a signature dish from our country. Many people like it very much . They espacially orderd in all event . This is because very healthy ingredients like mixture of chicken and fresh vegetables with eggs and tasty souces.This dish is very good in taste and presentable. That is why this dish is popular in all ages.

People like to eat and prefer to present their friend in any event. This is best optional dish for children and adult . Because icluded this dish you have many properties, So we realy like to order this type of dish which famous from around the world.

Please you make this dish withful concentration .Thanks

Kind Regards,

Zahida

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You attempt all three points: you offer to make a dish, identify it as Chinese rice, and give reasons for including it, such as its popularity and ingredients. However, the offer is not clearly framed as a personal commitment, and the dish itself remains vague: “Chinese rice” is not named more specifically or explained in enough detail. The reasons—being tasty, healthy, suitable for different ages, and popular at events—are relevant but mostly asserted rather than supported. The request “Please you make this dish” also makes your purpose unclear, since you are writing to offer to prepare it. State directly that you would be happy to cook it, describe its ingredients and preparation, and explain its cultural or practical appeal.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable opening, a body containing information about the dish, and a closing, so the reader can identify its general purpose. However, ideas are not consistently arranged in a clear progression. The shift from offering a dish to saying “Please you make this dish” is confusing, and several points about popularity and suitability repeat without developing the explanation. Connect the offer, description, and reasons in a more deliberate order, ideally using separate paragraphs for the offer and dish description, then its value to the event. Some linking words, such as “This is because” and “That is why,” help show relationships, but the connections are sometimes awkward or unclear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “ingredients,” “fresh vegetables,” “popular,” and “presentable,” which helps communicate the general idea. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the message difficult to follow, including “signature chines food,” “tasty souces,” “best optional dish,” and “withful concentration.” Repetition of “dish,” “popular,” and “event” also limits variety. Choose precise terms for the food and its qualities, and check spelling carefully. For example, explain whether it is fried rice or another specific rice dish, and use natural phrases such as “a well-loved choice” or “a colourful, filling dish” to make the description clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your writing relies mainly on short, simple statements, with a few attempts to connect ideas using “because” and “that is why.” These attempts show some effort to form longer sentences, but they are often incomplete or incorrectly structured. For example, “This is because very healthy ingredients…” lacks a clear subject and verb, while “Because icluded this dish you have many properties” does not form a complete, understandable clause. There are also recurring problems with sentence boundaries and punctuation, as in the opening sentence, which joins several clauses with commas. Practise complete sentence patterns, including “It contains…” and “I recommend it because…,” and use full stops to separate ideas.

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