Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You are a member of an International Students' club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world.

Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter

• offer to make a popular dish from your country
• describe what this dish is
• explain why it should be included in the event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Luis,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Jashan,

I'm glad to know that you u have started a new job and would be happy to help you out finding a suitable accommodation for you.

Hope you are in a radiant health and high spirits. It's really difficult for a newcomer to choose an appropriate accommodation according to their needs, Port Credit would be the best area for you.

The area is located next to the Lake Ontario which has all the amenities such as grocery store, shopping mall and bus stops close to each other. You can spend your leisure time at lakeshore park which would be at 7 minutes walking distance.

I'd highly recommend you to choose 1 bedroom apartment instead of sharing as you are introvert person and would be relaxing to stay in an apartment with the iconic views of sunsets.

Hope you find this relevant.

With love,

Navkaran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0

The response is completely off-topic. The task instructions required you to write to an event organiser named 'Luis' regarding an international food event. Instead, you wrote to 'Jashan' about finding accommodation. Because you failed to address any of the bullet points (offering a dish, describing it, or explaining its inclusion), the response fails to meet the requirements of the task. Additionally, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which further impacts the score. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your content directly responds to the specific scenario and instructions provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is structured with a salutation, body paragraphs, and a closing, which provides a basic framework. However, because the content is irrelevant to the prompt, the logical progression is disconnected from the task requirements. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the greeting and the body is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used in a limited way, such as 'The area is located' and 'I'd highly recommend', but they do not serve the purpose of the task. To improve, ensure that your ideas flow logically toward fulfilling the specific purpose of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally appropriate for a letter, but it is quite basic. Phrases like 'radiant health and high spirits' are somewhat clichéd. There are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'help you out finding' (should be 'help you find') and 'as you are introvert person' (should be 'as you are an introverted person'). The range of vocabulary is limited and does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more precise adjectives and varied collocations that are relevant to the specific topic of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are several grammatical errors throughout the text. For example, 'you u have started' contains a typo, and 'would be happy to help you out finding' is grammatically awkward. The phrase 'next to the Lake Ontario' is incorrect (it should be 'next to Lake Ontario'). There are also missing articles, such as 'as you are introvert person' (should be 'an introverted person'). While some complex sentences are attempted, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage.

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