Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You are a member of an International Students' club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world.

Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter

• offer to make a popular dish from your country
• describe what this dish is
• explain why it should be included in the event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Luis,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Luis,

I am writing to request your assistance that i am a member of international students club and you have to make a popular dish from my country.

Although everyone wants my homeland popular dish pide. Pide is a turkish dish and it is making from soft yeast dough,preparing the seasoned filling like chicken,beef,mushrooms,vegetables , and shaping into its iconic boat before heat baking.

It should be included in the event due to the fact that its taste is soo good,tailored experience. Although it is crafted with rare ingredients and offer an exclusive experience that is not available for everyone. Additionally this item is belongs to an occasion because its true market value is best determined by competitive bidding.

I request you have to offer this item in our menu. This dish is so delicious and everybody likes this.

I hope to hear from you soon,

Yours sincerely

John.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points: offering a dish, describing it, and explaining its inclusion. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat inconsistent. While the description of 'pide' is clear, the explanation for why it should be included is confusing. You mention 'competitive bidding' and 'market value,' which seem irrelevant to a student club event and detract from the clarity of your argument. To improve, ensure your reasons are logical and directly related to the context of a food celebration. The tone is also slightly inconsistent, as the opening sentence is grammatically awkward and does not clearly state your purpose.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the flow between ideas is often mechanical or disjointed. For example, the transition 'Although everyone wants my homeland popular dish' is confusing, and the use of 'Although' at the start of the third paragraph is logically incorrect as it does not introduce a contrast. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often misused or placed awkwardly, which disrupts the logical progression of your argument. Improving the use of linking words like 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'for instance' would help your ideas connect more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for higher bands. Phrases like 'its taste is soo good' are overly simplistic and informal. You attempt to use more descriptive language with terms like 'iconic boat' and 'seasoned filling,' which is good, but there are errors in collocation and word choice, such as 'this item is belongs to' and 'heat baking.' To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated adjectives and ensuring that your word choices are contextually appropriate for a formal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('this item is belongs'), incorrect verb forms ('it is making'), and awkward sentence structures ('I am writing to request your assistance that i am a member'). You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and your attempts at complex sentences often contain errors in punctuation or syntax. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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