Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You are a member of an International Students' club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world.

Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter

• offer to make a popular dish from your country
• describe what this dish is
• explain why it should be included in the event

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Luis,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear luis,

I hope you are doing well.i am writing this letter to request you for making a popular dish of our country.

As our club is organising an event in which all members of an organization have to make a famous dish of their country.I want you to make a dish for me as you are the expert in making biryani.Make it as delicious as u always make in your events for your valuable customers with full of taste .I believe everyone in our club will like it and this is only the dish which is in tradition of our country .I want everyone to try it , as it contains rice with chicken which will be a most perfect combination.Futhermore if you add some salad it will look better in presentation.Addtionally i would like to aknowledge you that we all are 100 in number so make sure quatity of dish must be sufficient.

I am thankful to you in advance.i look forward your response.

your sincerly,

rose

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The letter is only minimally responsive to the task because it reverses the central request: you ask Luis to make biryani for you, rather than offering to prepare a dish yourself. You do identify biryani and describe it as rice with chicken, and you give a reason for including it by saying it is traditional and likely to be enjoyed. However, these points are brief, and the dish’s features and cultural significance are not clearly developed. The request for salad and enough food for 100 people further shifts attention away from the required offer. To make the response fully relevant, offer to cook the dish, explain its ingredients and preparation, and show specifically what it would add to the celebration.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas are connected in a generally understandable order: you introduce the event, mention biryani, give a reason for serving it, and close with a practical note. However, the letter is presented as one long paragraph, so the main points are difficult to distinguish. Several linking expressions, including “Furthermore” and “Additionally,” introduce details that do not build a clear progression, while the repeated requests to Luis make the purpose less coherent. The opening and closing also need clearer separation and conventional formatting. Organise the letter into short paragraphs—for example, an offer and dish description, followed by its value to the event—and use transitions that show how each point supports your offer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the topic, including “popular dish,” “tradition,” “combination,” and “presentation.” There are also attempts to use more formal expressions, such as “I would like to acknowledge,” but this phrase does not fit the intended meaning, and “with full of taste” is an unnatural collocation. Spelling and word-form errors such as “Futhermore,” “Addtionally,” “aknowledge,” and “quatity” are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the message. Some informal forms, including “u,” are unsuitable for a letter to an organiser. Build a more precise range for describing food and cultural value, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes some longer sentences and attempts to connect ideas with clauses, as in “I believe everyone in our club will like it and this is only the dish which is in tradition of our country.” However, these longer structures are often difficult to control, and sentence boundaries and punctuation are inconsistent. Examples include “I hope you are doing well.i am writing” and “I look forward your response,” where capitalisation and grammatical patterns need correction. There are also errors in articles and sentence construction, such as “will be a most perfect combination.” Use a wider range of shorter, accurately formed sentences alongside carefully checked complex sentences; this will make your meaning clearer and improve control.

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